Poem: The End

[lizzie_marie_23]

Comments

[samueljames]

I liked he flow of this, dark but good imagery.

[lizzie_marie_23]

Oh thanks so much. I'm definitely dabbling in dark imagery these days.

[ayascythe]

This was amazing. <3 I especially loved this part:

"See you around," it says, "I tried,
But you were so busy,
And waiting is so hard"

[lizzie_marie_23]

I'm so happy you like this! And thanks for pointing out those lines; they're my favorites as well.

[caramelsilver]

I really, really like how you begin it with "It's goes like this" and "Or" "another time" "earlier" it gives it such a good rythm and it makes it more... flowing. It feels like the same person in different worlds, if you know what I mean? Different scenario, same result.

I love the first stanza, and the town you don't know the name of. And the earlier stanza. The ending is dark and lovely and packs a punch!

I think this is really great. I love the dark imagery, it's my favorite when it comes to poetry.

[lizzie_marie_23]

Thank you so much for reviewing. It felt a bit risky to start the stanzas that way, so I'm pleased that it had the right effect. I was totally trying to make it seem like different worlds.

I'm so happy that you like the ending. Dark imagery is one of my favorites too.