The Right and The Wronged (2/2)

[live_by_lyrics]

Title: The Right and The Wronged (2/2)
Author: Gess aka live_by_lyrics
Pairing: Alex Gaskarth/Jack Barakat, (Suggested: Alex Gaskarth/Zack Merrick)
P.O.V.: first person Alex Gaskarth
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Excessive swearing, offensive commentary on women and religion, violence with weapons and death.
Summary: An officer watches the enemy die.
Disclaimer: This

Comments

[broken_capulet]

I truly, truly loved this. I can't help but wish that Alex and Zack end up together. That would be so sweet.

[gaskarthloveme]

OMG THE JACK AT THE END, WAS THAT JACK'S KID. HOLY CRAP. THIS STORY WAS JUST BOOOM. SO FUCKING GOOD. FAVE FAVE ANOTHER FAVE BY YOU.

[broken_capulet]

WAIT OH MY GOD I DIDN'T EVEN MAKE THAT CONNECTION

[gaskarthloveme]

I DON'T EVEN KNOW IF ITS TRUE BUT IT SEEMS POSSIBLE? I FEEL QUITE PROUD RIGHT NOW.

[live_by_lyrics]

I FEEL LIKE I SHOULD CAPS-LOCK MY RESPONSE JUST 'CAUSE BUT-

You're right! :) It is Jack's son, but since Jack is never mentioned by name here I thought I'd give it to his son. You know from the photo that Jack the solider got someone pregnant before he left and then later Zack says Jack the boy was found in refugee camp..."His mother died during child birth and his dad is listed as missing indefinitely. He was a foot soldier in the South who got separated from his troop after Omega was bombed."

And then when Alex says that he thought everyone was accounted for during that mission, Zack says that only from their side, so you know whoever it was, he was from the enemy side. (That's why Alex expects Jack the boy to have an accent but he doesn't cause he grew up in Alex's country!)

So GOOD EYE! This fic was a mix of really blunt and pretty subtle so it's bound to throw some people off.

And thank you for the comments <3

[abbyliciousness]

This was so good! You are a wonderful author! I actually wish you had a book so I could read your stuff for longer. Everything I was going to freak out about related to this story has already been said so, KEEP WRITING BECAUSE ITS AWESOME

[live_by_lyrics]

Awh you're a sweetie :) Thank you! I wish I had time to sit and write a proper book. I think I'll have to wait until I'm older, wiser and retired bahahah...but I am planning on editing a final version of TFS once I'm done and make it a pdf people can have?

[abbyliciousness]

That would be sweet! I consider it a book that just isnt finished yet because it is so well written and lengthy and is more like a book. It makes me happy :)

[merrikat95]

I truly believe that you are the most talented reader that posts to ATB. In my books you're up there with successful authors who have published works and are writers for a living. You're incredibly talented and you will go so far with your writing, I know it. Everything about this was absolute perfection, and the cut was my favourite part (It hurts a little more than sleeping on bed with no mattress and a little less than not being able to call your mom for her birthday because you don’t how to tell her you shot somebody for the first time that morning). Your writing is so good that it feels relatable, which it totally isn't because I haven't shot a man in my life but I FELT like I had... I can't explain it with words. Your writing makes me FEEL; emotionally I get so frazzled and my head hurts and my heart aches and sometimes I even tear up because I'm so overwhelmed with all the emotions.
To wrap up this comment, I want to thank you for posting your stories, because they give me so much delight to read them.

[live_by_lyrics]

asdfghjkjhgf, oh wow, that's a bold statement, thank you for that! <3 I really liked the cut as well, but looking back on this piece I really should edited it more cause I missing the 'a' in 'sleeping on A bed with no mattress' hahah, proof that I am not flawless.

But making people FEEL is my exact aim here. This piece was a real challenge for me because I've never been in a war, or shot anyone either. I basically only worked on it when I was feeling really crappy so that I used universal negative emotions of guilt and loss but manipulated them into a completely different scenerio.

I've got a few favourite authors who always leave me a in complete tizzy when I read their works, so to know I'm able to do that someone is beyond gratifying. Thank you for reading!