To Love At All - Chapter One: Just a Ride

[littleone87]

Title: To Love At All Chapter One: Just a Ride
Author: littleone87 (or ParalegalAlly at FF.net)
Rated: M
Disclaimer: I own nothing!
Summary: “You always want something you can’t have and that is exactly what has happened here. I can’t have you, therefore I want you.
Pairing: Mark and Lexie from Grey's Anatomy

Comments

[caer]

Well, shit. It's all I can say. (LOL

[littleone87]

Thank you! :D

I am glad there were parts you HUGELY loved. I am glad the beginning drew you right in. I always try to make the opening gripping so people want to continue on.

lol, you love that he pulled over that much? hehe.

"“I don’t want to be alone...She didn’t want to go to Meredith’s, or see George."
Ahhh! The sentence structure for that passage is *beyond* perfect to emphasize the importance of her wanting to be with *him* and not anyone else =)

I literally changed this at the *last* moment. And I'm glad it worked out. I was worried about that part! She definitely wanted to be with him and no one else. :)

"“I don’t believe you,” she leaned forward. “Even though you want to, you won’t sleep with me, but every other woman you take home you sleep with.”
“I’m not touching you,” he confirmed."
This might possibly be my favourite lines in the chapter! It says *so* much, and while normally I would go into a whole spiel, I won't this time because its 3AM =(

Please feel free to go into a whole spiel, I enjoy it. :D

"“Well,

[citron_presse]

I always wondered what would have happened if Mark had taken Lexie home at that point and I think you handled this beautifully.

I really like Lexie's bravery in insisting that he take her home with him; and I love how you have them kind of negotiate through their insecurities until they reach a point where they're comfortable to stay with each other and talk.

I like the lost kitten comparison coming from Mark - I think it says something about how he's willing to be soft around Lexie. And I love Mark's Well, shit, at the end. Very nicely done.

[littleone87]

Oh wow, I am so honored that you would comment on my story! It pales in comparison to yours.

I am also so glad that you loved Lexie's bravery. I wasn't sure how that would come off, seeing as how Lexie probably wouldn't have done that any other time. I wanted them to talk instead of going right into having sex which is what they would normally do.

I am so glad I ended up changing it from wounded deer to lost kitten (Yup, I had wounded deer and I thought it was good - how awful?) You can thank Labil for that since she told me deer would not work..lol) But yes, I love the kitten analogy because I want Mark to be soft and different around Lexie

(Did I make any sense in what I said? lol. I'm just so excited you reviewed!)

I put the "Well, Shit," in at the very *last* moment. What I had before did not work at all.

Thank you so much for reviewing! :) I hope you like the rest of the story. :)