Mombasa Revisited

[littlenotebook]

Title: Mombasa Revisited
Fandom: Inception
Disclaimer: The movie Inception does not belong to me and I am making no money from this story, just a good-ole fanwork!
Pairing/Characters: Arthur/Eames; Dom, Yusuf
Word Count: 4,725
Rating: PG
Summary: “We don’t just need a thief;” Dom glances up briefly; “We need a forger

Comments

[towel_master]

Oh, I really enjoyed this! You have the characters down perfectly. :D The sexual tension... It's wonderful. :) And I love Yusuf. XD It was interesting to see this from Arthur's POV, too, because it brings a new outlook on the film. And I can probably never tire of this film, so it's all good. XD

One note. Here: "Eames turns them down a street, less people, and to their left framed pictures hang all over the cement wall, ceramic tiles after a generic European style." It should be "fewer people." ^^;

[sunnyrea]

Thanks on both fronts! I try so hard with the grammar and yet I always end up messing something up! Anyhow, glad you enjoyed it.

[towel_master]

No problem and you're welcome!

[crazyeverafter]

Oh my goodness, this is perfect, perfect, PERFECT. <3

I can see it all, and just YAY. I love the description of Arthur's dream and then the end. The action sequence (Arthur being chased) was very well done, too.

Excellent all around. ♥

[sunnyrea]

Aw well *blush* thanks!

[kittie_gurl57]

Oh wow. As well as writing an amazing fic, you have an awesome icon! This is so funny. xD

[sunnyrea]

I did not make it, I just use it as much as I can. (And this one!)

[beachlass]

Mmmm... This is quite, quite perfect.

[clair3]

2 thumbs up*

[_profiterole_]

That was lovely, and I'm now wondering why I don't see more fics on this topic, it just makes so much sense.

[littlenotebook]

Not enough people do rewrite fics. I think they're so interesting. Just change one thing and see how it could have gone!