Life Less Ordinary, Part 2

[littlenotebook]

Title: Life Less Ordinary (2/2)
Fandom: Warehouse 13
Characters/Pairing: Artie/James; Mrs. Frederic and OCs
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 13,436
Summary: The story of Arthur Nielson and James MacPherson. Partners at the Warehouse leading to love and loss and maybe even hate. What their relationship was really like before they wanted to kill each

Comments

[littlenotebook]

ooo thanks for catching that!

And glad you enjoyed it despite thinking you wouldn't so much!

[raedbard]

DUUUUDE. This is EPIC, as clearly you already know! ;) But really, what could fit James and Artie better? *squees* (Also I really have to step up my game now for your fic. *g* Hopefully that will be with you before very much longer!)

Okay. Um. This will be quite a lot of feedback, because sometimes I like to go almost line-by-line because I loved something that much. *g* Hi, I'm a crazy person. ;) ANYWAY.

Intrigued by Artie's first partner, Nate (and the ferret, hee! The ferrets never get old *g*) and the hints of that earlier partnership and and ... yeah. I get excited by backstory. *g*

“Do you tend to get many unexpected visitors out here?” James said, looking down at the plate but not taking a cookie.
PERFECT James. I love how you have him take this whole first scene perfectly in his stride -- he doesn't take a cookie, has already read the manual, how he fits in and makes the space his own right from the beginning. He's his devilishly charming self. Gah, I love!

“I could make it into a very lovely flashlight,” James said about

#2

[raedbard]

As I said above, ♥the record player♥, but also the slowly building sense that James doesn't think about the artifacts in the same way as Artie, that he recognises (misguidedly or not) their positive applications, that he's already started to use them for himself. And then how you build on that in the next section. AWESOME.

And then this, which is chilling:
“What about nothing then?” James said from behind him. Eeeek.

By which time, I had completely forgotten about Carol. And you drop the bomb on the reader exactly as it is dropped on Artie. DAMN. (And somehow juxtaposing that with Pandora's Box is killing me! Sometimes it's the little things. *g*)

James stared back at him, lips tight with a resigned expression on his face. “I didn’t want the Warehouse to touch her.”This is a very telling thing for James to say, I think. And I guess Artie's reaction bears that out. I say again: GENIUS. I love how understated it is, again the subtext. Wonderful. Also how you're dealing with the Carol Problem, if you like! It's not an approach my way

#3

[raedbard]

“Oh, yes, of course, policy policy policy!”
It's fascinating, watching him devolve into the person he becomes in the show, just slow cracks forming. You've brought all that out brilliantly.

“You and I could get out of here and just live happily, not be agents anymore. We could take some of these artifacts to live on, have a normal life, and not have to worry about all of this.”
Oh god, this. So much this.

What James was really saying was ‘I know you love me, you love me enough to give me her.’
*heart breaks*

“Collateral damage,” James said, his face hard and angry.
And the transformation from unruly hero to charming villain is complete. Oh, James. :(

“It’s your own twisted obsession with the Warehouse and its mission to guard all the artifacts away from the world as though they were all such terrible blights upon it. You can’t see the artifacts as anything but problems to be contained.”I love this philosophical wrangling on the interpretation of the 'good' of the Warehouse. I loved it in the show, and I love how you've used it

Re: #3

[sunnyrea]

Uhhhhhhhhhhhh, can I just say first off that you are the very best commenter in like, FOREVER!!!! I'm exceedingly happy about how much you liked this and how many of the little thing I put in that you saw, THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THAT!

So yeah, let me say, I loved the squee explosion. Also very glad how I made you not sure if you liked James or Artie best.

OH AND As per 'MacPherson'. Nothing like flirting with a guy when you're about to Bronze him.
I'm so glad I'm not the only one who saw that because TOTALLY!

And yeah, I enjoyed writing this so much and thinking up things for artifacts to do and yes I totally love Todd too, he's like an early Pete and omg this was so hard and so wonderful to write and I'm so glad to have a worthy person to write it for.

So, yeah, glad you liked it and thanks for the UBER AWESOME comment(s)!!!!!

[ktbean]

Awesome! And totally epic.
I've rec'd you over on the crack_van today.

[littlenotebook]

I just saw the other comment. Glad to see more people on this totally (or so I wish) canon ship! Thanks for the rec!