Comments | little_yew: another 2 + unsolicited whining

little_yew

another 2 + unsolicited whining

Nov 27, 2005 23:34

I am trying to relax, even though I'm so stressed, my stomach's upset. I went to bizarre baazar, which was nice, and got super-duper lost. Fuck I-90. Fuck the west side. Next time, I'm taking I-77 and going straight up Detroit. Also, I bought two more pins than I can now locate, which wearies me ( Read more... )

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vorgefuhl November 28 2005, 05:12:47 UTC

damn, yvette, these are fucking good.

its trail into the past
a mobius strip--
a tale with one side.

love. that.

the second one flows really well, I could read it all without having to go back (I almost always have to go back with poems).

little_yew November 28 2005, 15:56:55 UTC

Thanks a lot! I hope the people reading think so too.

amoralphreak November 28 2005, 17:19:15 UTC

the second one kills me. it's my favorite of all your poems so far; it's so tight and well-crafted.

there's something i really like in the first as well (though as a minor concrit i'd definitely like to see it even more expanded...)

little_yew November 28 2005, 19:35:14 UTC

Thanks! I don't typically write long pieces, then, four years late, I discovered the art of enjambing stanzas ^^ If you have any concrit at all, let me know. It's not too late for me to fine tune.

morganmac November 29 2005, 04:25:18 UTC

More! Encore if you will. Also what ever happened to the Harry Potter pics premiere pics? I've been dying to see if I'll recognize you. There's only so many black people in Athens at one time.