Comments | little_creek96: FIC: Ink

little_creek96

FIC: Ink

Jul 14, 2014 16:35

Ink
Characters: Sam and Dean
Rating: PG-13
Word count: 1075
Summary: The darkness is alive, and it’s killing Sam.

A/N: I wrote another hurt Sam one-shot in an attempt to get myself out of a rut. Enjoy!

( He can't breathe in the ink, it's choking him, filling his mouth and spilling down his chin. )

fanfiction, supernatural

Comments 18

carocali July 18 2014, 18:15:28 UTC

I really like this! I'm wondering why Sam thought it was ink? Um, so if you wanted to expand a bit more, that would be okay. :D

Really nice work!

:D
Caroline

little_creek96 July 19 2014, 01:48:09 UTC

Thank you! I'm already thinking up a sequel to it, which will explain some stuff. :)

lauehime July 18 2014, 20:56:37 UTC

Loved the very confused and dark atmosphere that you kept floating over thoughts and dialogues. I loved the fuzzy feeling of Sam's POV and the envelopping darkness that only Dean seemed to be able to come through. I loved how scared Dean sounded and feeling it through Sam made it even more uncomfortable and alarming. Even though I'm really curious to know what happened, it's cool to have that open ending. I can imagine things :) very well done !!

little_creek96 July 19 2014, 01:49:20 UTC

Thanks! (and BTW, I love your icon.)

borgmama1of5 July 18 2014, 21:29:46 UTC

Nice how you just jump the reader right into Sam's head, and keep us there by ending without ever explaining!

little_creek96 July 19 2014, 01:50:43 UTC

Thanks! It was fun writing confused Sammy's POV!

borgmama1of5 November 11 2014, 12:43:47 UTC

I loved the urgency in this, and the mystery because we only get Sam's POV, and I was very scared for him!

little_creek96 November 12 2014, 01:21:12 UTC

Another review from you! :D Thanks!