Comments | lit_luminary: S6 canon-based sonnets.

lit_luminary

S6 canon-based sonnets.

Jun 21, 2011 00:04

I wrote these months ago and never posted them, so I might as well rectify that. (If you like them, please see the 'sonnets' tag for others.)

( 'Broken': House in Mayfield. )

chase, sonnets, poetry, house

Comments 6

damigella_314 June 21 2011, 06:20:20 UTC

I finally found the courage to read your sonnets and... well, they're easier on me than I thought. The point, apparently, is that I'm so familiar with the sonnet form. Poetry in English still feels weird. It's in a sense like singing in German - all those consonants, like hurdles in your way. Plus when you come to a vowel sound you sometimes end up realizing it doesn't rhyme, and it's like a broken promise - and then it's clear that you mispronounced another word a few lines before, so you have to go back and do it again.

Upon re-reading, these problems faint. And yet, the sonnets become more, not less, weird. One problem is graphical: in Italy, there's always a blank line after each quartet or tercet. Here you have to do all the effort and keep counting in your head. But finally what's upsetting is the meter - ten syllables per line, and the accent is always on the last. Unnatural for some who's used to sonnets being composed of endecasillabi in a language where words ending with an accent are called tronche, like a cut tree, while ( ... )

lit_luminary June 21 2011, 06:42:40 UTC

I wasn't bothered by the comment--actually, when I post poetry, I've learned not to expect many comments, so it was wonderful to get one at all. I was delighted you tried my sonnets, since I can only imagine how difficult it is to read poetry in a foreign language. (I was very interested in the introduction to Italian poetic meter, so don't worry that you went off-topic with that ( ... )

damigella_314 June 21 2011, 07:02:21 UTC

Glad you weren't bothered!
As per Dibala, my very scant knowledge of the history of the Third World is that killing a blood-thirsty dictator doesn't necessarily improve the situation (points at Iraq, whistles).
Plus, killing someone as their attending physician, using medicine to do it, is a terrible, terrible crime. It's sad that canon shows the Catholic priest telling Chase he has to go the police - because that's not what was told to the child-raping priests.
I was even upset about someone using a "happy happy joy joy" tag to describe Bin Laden's murder - in their place, I would have wanted him to rot in prison, and I can't ever be happy about a death, no matter how many murders the killed person has on his conscience.
[My country (Tuscany) abolished death penalty more than two hundred years ago, afaik as first in Europe.]

lit_luminary June 21 2011, 07:25:11 UTC

Point again: killing the bloodthirsty dictator really doesn't do that much appreciable good. Real life isn't a fairytale, where everything is solved once the hero kills the villain.

(As far as Dibala, I remember thinking when I watched the episode that "the moderates are taking over; there's hope for peace talks" was at best a gross oversimplification of what was likely to be a bloody process. Whatever can be said about the means [and I admit that many damning things can be said], Chase's intentions were good--but ironically, he may very well have ended up making a bad situation much worse.)

I live in NY, and could see the smoking ruins of the Towers against the skyline from my home, about 20 miles away. I'll never forget 9/11. But shooting Bin Laden didn't undo anything, and didn't bring us any closer to stopping the wars. (It seems so stupid, so meaningless, to go to war for vengeance and answer murder with more deaths.)

yarroway June 21 2011, 09:20:53 UTC

Going in reverse order...

Kyrie makes an excellent point. Things can't be undone, and some of them change a person irrevocably. Unfortunately canon never followed through with this, just used it as an excuse to usher Cameron off stage and then forgot about it.

Lines In The Sand...my view of canon was different here. I thought House was deliberately trying to get between Chase and Cameron in the aftermath of Dibala. So in that sense I thought he was to blame. That aside, of course he had nothing to do with Dibala. He does encourage his people to make conscious choices and to question the rules...but that's a far cry from what Cameron accused him of. Then again she was pretty psycho the last 2 seasons.

I saved the best for last. You did a marvellous job in Broken, and I generally hate everything to do with that episode. The introspective direction you chose here works far better for me than what canon gave us.

lit_luminary June 21 2011, 09:36:05 UTC

Thank you very much for the comments! (I don't expect much commentary on poetry, so it's always a pleasant surprise.)

I go into more depth with the sonnet redoublé I wrote around the events of "The Tyrant" and surrounding episodes, which you'll probably enjoy if you liked these sonnets and the fic I wrote for that arc--they never should have swept that under the rug, which is part of the reason I keep coming back to it ( ... )