Old War Horses

[lit_gal]

I've had two people email and say they couldn't get into chapter 18 on Old War Horses, and it's the coding with the links that seems to be a little more complicated that necessary, so I'm changing the links here.

If you want to read the early chapters, go to Twisting the Hellmouth.

If you want to read the most recent chapters, use tags.

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Comments

[heeroluva]

Odd. I didn't have any problem with the link.

And, oh not. Someone's pissed

[lit_gal]

I'm not sure why people had trouble, but I just reposted.

And yeah, someone's really pissed. Poor Mal... he's screwing up being sly as much as he screwed up being straight.

[dharma_slut]

haha "can you help me practice the sly stuff?" that's adorable and such a lovely simple solution for a very simple man.

Too much Chinese slang, it distracts me-- I'm wondering what the words mean instead of marveling at the ways in which Blair uses them.

[auntyk]

re the Chinese slang: total agreement.

[lit_gal]

Jayne is a simple man, and I really want that to come across. I love him, but he's just not bright.

I'm sorry the Chinese is distracting. I wonder if that's because you don't read a lot of Firefly where it's much more common. Anyway, I'll try to tone it down a little, and most terms are on my resource page if you're truly interested: http://litgal.org/Thoughts/insults.htm

[mulder200]

I feel like Jim. This conversation was taking all kinds of twists and turns. Talk about mental whiplash!

“You think you two could help me practice the sly stuff?” Jayne asked. It was the tone, the perfectly innocent tone, that kept Jim’s brain from rightly understanding just what Jayne had just said. Instead, he stared at Jayne, his brain trying to sort through that combination of words and come to any meaning that made sense.

“Cobb!” Mal’s voice bellowed, and Jim’s guts about turned to water. Cao. There was a reason he was always telling Blair to stay out of people’s personal lives.

LMAO! Jayne is simple but honest and at least he knows what he wants.

Oh dear! It looks like somebody is pissed! Poor Jim! Blair gets him involved in all kinds of shit he rather avoid.

[lit_gal]

Jim really does have trouble keep up with Blair and that brain of his, but then I think most people do.

Jayne is probably the first person to really shock Blair in a good long time. Of course, from Jayne's perspective, it was the logical solution, but then I don't think many people have brains that work the way Jayne's does.

[dustandroses]

“You think you two could help me practice the sly stuff?”

LOL. Perfect timing. Jayne's innocent question is so much like him. He's got the perfect guides here on the ship with him, might as well take advantage of them, right?

I really feel sorry for Jayne, always assuming that he's the one at fault. Okay, so sometimes he is, but in this case, all he did was have a bad case of unrequited lust/love. It was Mal that fucked it up. Maybe hearing that Jayne is willing to turn to others (even if only for 'sly lessons') will make Mal realize he needs to do something to fix this mess.

(I have to admit, I keep thinking about the plates of food they grabbed off the table in the last chapter...do they still have their plates full of eggs with them?)

I love the way Blair has of turning people into his protectors even against their wills. Jayne getting offended on Blair's behalf really made me smile.

[lit_gal]

Jayne is a pretty simple man and he comes up with simple solutions. This makes sense to him. I doubt anyone else is all that convinced of the plan, but it makes sense to Jayne

[dustandroses]

LOL. Poor Jim. He worries too much.

I'm so glad I could help. *g*

I find myself worrying about stuff like that all the time. Usually it's too late to tell the author, and often they aren't interested in fixing anything once it's posted, anyway. I'm the type that will go back into a story I've written five years down the line to fix a spelling mistake, so I have trouble understanding authors like that. But hey, it takes all types, right?

[lit_gal]

Spelling mistakes I often let go only because I don't have time, and I often have to pick and choose my battles, and sadly fanfic seems to be the battle I have to leave more often than not these days. However, I fix it when I have time, and I always fix a logical error like that. If I were to read a story with that sort of error, it would make my eyebrows go up.

[lit_gal]

Weeeeee I'm so glad I could catch you as off guard as I caught Jim!