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Undertow

Sep 17, 2011 16:40

Title: Undertow
Fandom: Chronicles of Narnia
Rating: General
Disclaimer: No profit was made in the writing of this story.
Author's Note: Golden Age fic. This is what happens when you combine a book on Renaissance history, a random episode of The Tudors and too much Guy Gavriel Kay at an impressionable age. Book and movie compatible ( Read more... )

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Comments 9

snacky September 19 2011, 23:31:53 UTC

Oh poor Susan! I liked how she knew exactly what needed to be done, and didn't hesitate, but paid the price in the end.

And the scene with the mermaid was fantastic.

liptonrm September 26 2011, 13:33:28 UTC

Thank you so much! Poor Susan indeed. She gave up so much for Narnia and look where it got her in the end.

hiyacynth September 20 2011, 14:58:12 UTC

So sorry it has taken me a week to read and respond. This is awesome! You have such a natural feel for the more formal language here, and it's really lyrical and ... royal. Fantastically done. I love how you have each of the four feeling "the most," but in different ways. Edmund is guilt, Peter responsibility, Lucy pure grief, and Susan this weight of what the changes to the country demand. She seems so practical, but no without deep emotion. The scene with the sea and the mermaid are mind blowing. So good. Scary, then sexy, then scary again. Geez, Susan/Mermaid/The Sea forever, right?? Also love how in that last scene, it's clear that she's caught up in both the sea and the mermaid, longing for them both in ways that are not entirely unpleasant but unbearable at the same time ( ... )

liptonrm September 26 2011, 13:38:19 UTC

Thank you! *hugs*

Actually, I was thinking about "The Horse and His Boy" while I was writing this. Susan is so committed to playing her role that I don't think she always sees what she'll give up by doing so.

I really need to write more Narnia fic. There are so many things springing up in my brain.

angel_in_tears September 22 2011, 12:43:44 UTC

liptonrm September 26 2011, 13:38:55 UTC

Thank you so much! I really loved dipping into this story.

andi1235 September 23 2011, 16:51:56 UTC

Awww! :( Sad, but LOVE! You are really GOOD! :)

liptonrm September 26 2011, 13:41:22 UTC

OMG THANK YOU!

I got so ridiculously excited to see your comment because OMG someone who's known me forever liked something I wrote! It means a lot, it really does.

Thank you! Again! =D

andi1235 September 26 2011, 14:29:45 UTC

Well, it's true! :) You're awesome!