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lipstikstain

Fic: Know Her (4/?)

Feb 15, 2006 15:59

Title: Know Her (4 ( Read more... )

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Comments 18

aaeryn February 16 2006, 03:04:29 UTC

AUHHH He reached for his cell phone, dialing Mac’s number.

“Hey, it’s me. We have to

We have to what??? Oh I'm dying.

audiologic February 16 2006, 05:24:34 UTC

I really really like this.

One, I can see it happening. Veronica's character this season has grown into something different than S1 and we saw it in a lot of her interaction with Duncan. Your characterization fits the Veronica of right now really nicely. And two, the format is just fantastic. Very original and a very good storyline. I love how it's building up so nicely.

I just have one friendly piece of constructive criticism.. in some parts the tense in your sentences seemed to go back and forth between present and past and that threw me off a bit. Maybe review that?

Otherwise, great job hun. =) I'm hooked and I can't wait to see where this is headed.

lipstikstain February 16 2006, 23:29:19 UTC

Thanks for the constructive criticism...always need that to balance things out. I do notice that I do that a lot - so I'll definitely be more careful on my next posting.

thanks for reading it!

marty2103 February 16 2006, 15:48:52 UTC

OMG it´s great, I cannot wait for the next update!

anonymous February 16 2006, 22:16:27 UTC

Really love this. But why don't you post this in the Veronica/Casey community? I know its LoVe, but really, anything that features Casey is good!

la623 February 17 2006, 03:59:48 UTC

I loved this! This story is really good...looking forward to the next chapter! :)