Are there any folk familiar with the Wiltshire dialect of English?

[varyar]

If so, I'd be supremely in your debt if you could give the following passage a run through with a red pen. A bit of background that may help: this takes place in 1889 in the fictional county of Barsetshire. To simplify things, I've decided to represent the rural dialect of said county with that of 19th century Wiltshire

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[oh_meow]

Did you write it and want people to proof-read it, or is it actually from Trollope and you want people to help you understand it?

[varyar]

The former - I wrote it and I want it checked for accuracy. (Also, my source wasn't Trollope, but Edward Slow: http://edwardslow.wordpress.com/03-his-works/)

[dougalbug]

Wiltshire lady here! Funnily enough, despite living in Wales now, I was in Frome yesterday.

There's a couple of different dialects in Wiltshire.
When you say red pen, what is it exactly you're looking for?

[varyar]

Hi! Thanks for the reply.

What are the different Wiltshire dialects?

As for red pen - editorial remarks and corrections of mistakes.

[taversham]

I'm in Devon which is similar regarding dialect, but not completely the same and obviously I'm over a century out of date, so apologies if anything in this comment is wrong, and feel free to ignore any/all of it, and also I feel like I've been massively picky because what you have already is essentially fine really, but anyway...

The link you posted above isn't working for me, but I've had a quick reread of The Moonrakers and The Transvaal War, and I realise Mr Slow was inconsistent about...everything, so in general I've assumed things like using both "and" and "an", and "just" and "juz" are in homage to him and haven't commented on that sort of thing (though in the latter case might I suggest "jist" instead of either

[varyar]

Many, many, many thanks