Oh, this is so, so, SO very incredibly PERFECT!!!! I think you have this amazing ability to write ADULT dialogue. (Uh, and incredibly realistic sex, but! DIALOGUE!)
Oh, man, wow. Your Jim is such a cool customer, and you give Bones this slight layer of insecurity that is A++++ unique and awesome and, gah. I really freaking loved this story. LOVED IT.
DUDE I LOVE YOU BACK. Bless your heart for being first across the finish line. This effing thing took WAY too long to write for a gimmicky kink_meme response, I am slow like the primeval glaciers, ARGH.
But you make it all worthwhile! Thank you and your wonderful monkiebrains so much, and let's do comment!fic again real soon!
Wow! That was really lovely, and clever, and awesome! The bottlecap bit makes me think of the infinite improbability drive in the Hitchhikers' guide. Such a clever idea! And I just loved Kirk and McCoy's conversations, and the subtle differences and similarities between the different versions. I wish I had more insightful things to say, but I will just conclude by saying again the this was lovely and awesome and funny, and I am impressed by your cleverness and writing skills.
I love Hitchhikers' Guide, and yes, that's a great way to look at it--if everything happens, that will eventually include the thing you want to happen. I only wrote three of the scenarios, but I like to think they went through the black hole millions of times, and eventually the reality Kirk wanted came around and he made it stick. Glad it worked for you!
That right there was amazing! I loved the three different ways you approached that day and especially the conversation between Kirk and Bones. There are no words to describe how much I loved their conversations, or Kirk's internal musings. Loved how you used the alternate events to pick up on different aspects of their characters.
And the ending was hilarious. (I'm reading this on my brother's bed and when I got to the bit about Bones' fly I gasped, threw my head back laughing and hit it on the wall. My mom comes running down the hall: "Are you okay Honey!? What happened? Don't scare me like that! And Me all: sorry Mum. *sad face trying not to laugh*)
So epically happy that you both wrote and shared this story. ^-^
Aww, apologies to you mom, and to your head--that's a funny story, thanks for sharing!
I'm glad you liked the conversations and that they didn't seem too rambly. I liked making Kirk contradict himself in the different timelines because that's how I think it works--your opinions really vary according to your moods, or what the other person says. Few of us know ourselves well enough to be consistent in these matters!
Oh, I love this! It's like, they've been holding back their feelings for so long, and then... bam, the floodgates are opened, there's no turning back, they're past the point of no return, and it just swamps them.
“More,” he whispered. “Just like that.”
McCoy did as he asked, tightening his grip just short of crushing, and Kirk felt his arms begin to tremble.
“Oh my god, Jim,” McCoy gasped into his shoulder.
“I know,” Kirk said, running a hand up through his hair. “Me too. It’s OK.”
That. That, right there. That absolutely makes this fic. Because you can just tell that they're reeling with the intensity of their feelings for each other, that they could have no corporeal form whatsoever and they'd still be just as desperate to crawl into each other's souls and stay there.
they could have no corporeal form whatsoever and they'd still be just as desperate to crawl into each other's souls and stay there.
Holy crap. You do write fiction, right? Right? Because with a sentence like that, you should. Thank you for reading, and for sharing your lovely comments.
As a matter of fact, I do write fanfic. Ninety percent of it is shite, and another five percent is an exercise in "how badly can I yank characters out of character for the purposes of sap, smut, or both?"
The remainder lurks on the Pit. The best of the lot is my Out of Africa fic. I've been trying to replicate its passion in the Star Trek fandom with no success. *sad face* My NCIS stuff isn't bad, my Warriors stuff is utterly juvenile, and all the rest is average. If you're interested, I'm known as EquestrienneDreams over there. Happy browsing!
As a matter of fact, I do write fanfic. Ninety percent of it is shite, and another five percent is an exercise in "how badly can I yank characters out of character for the purposes of sap, smut, or both?"
SWEET. I like it already. I will definitely check it out. Out of Africa, eh? That's interesting!
Argh, too much great fic in the world. What I wouldn't give for a convenient case of mono.
that was lovely and hot and I do love when someone busts out some science on these hot boys too, whether or not they are actually aware of it ;) thank you!
The science--AWW, YEAH. I often say that I'm not a scientist (not even close) but I am a science groupie. I'm hoping some porn-loving physicists will turn up here and tell me that I've been an inaccurate girl. Roy Kerr is actually a New Zealand physicist, so I imagine him looking like Karl Urban. Thanks so much for reading!
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Oh, this is so, so, SO very incredibly PERFECT!!!! I think you have this amazing ability to write ADULT dialogue. (Uh, and incredibly realistic sex, but! DIALOGUE!)
Oh, man, wow. Your Jim is such a cool customer, and you give Bones this slight layer of insecurity that is A++++ unique and awesome and, gah. I really freaking loved this story. LOVED IT.
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But you make it all worthwhile! Thank you and your wonderful monkiebrains so much, and let's do comment!fic again real soon!
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That right there was amazing! I loved the three different ways you approached that day and especially the conversation between Kirk and Bones. There are no words to describe how much I loved their conversations, or Kirk's internal musings. Loved how you used the alternate events to pick up on different aspects of their characters.
And the ending was hilarious. (I'm reading this on my brother's bed and when I got to the bit about Bones' fly I gasped, threw my head back laughing and hit it on the wall. My mom comes running down the hall: "Are you okay Honey!? What happened? Don't scare me like that! And Me all: sorry Mum. *sad face trying not to laugh*)
So epically happy that you both wrote and shared this story. ^-^
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I'm glad you liked the conversations and that they didn't seem too rambly. I liked making Kirk contradict himself in the different timelines because that's how I think it works--your opinions really vary according to your moods, or what the other person says. Few of us know ourselves well enough to be consistent in these matters!
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“More,” he whispered. “Just like that.”
McCoy did as he asked, tightening his grip just short of crushing, and Kirk felt his arms begin to tremble.
“Oh my god, Jim,” McCoy gasped into his shoulder.
“I know,” Kirk said, running a hand up through his hair. “Me too. It’s OK.”
That. That, right there. That absolutely makes this fic. Because you can just tell that they're reeling with the intensity of their feelings for each other, that they could have no corporeal form whatsoever and they'd still be just as desperate to crawl into each other's souls and stay there.
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Holy crap. You do write fiction, right? Right? Because with a sentence like that, you should. Thank you for reading, and for sharing your lovely comments.
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As a matter of fact, I do write fanfic. Ninety percent of it is shite, and another five percent is an exercise in "how badly can I yank characters out of character for the purposes of sap, smut, or both?"
The remainder lurks on the Pit. The best of the lot is my Out of Africa fic. I've been trying to replicate its passion in the Star Trek fandom with no success. *sad face* My NCIS stuff isn't bad, my Warriors stuff is utterly juvenile, and all the rest is average. If you're interested, I'm known as EquestrienneDreams over there. Happy browsing!
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SWEET. I like it already. I will definitely check it out. Out of Africa, eh? That's interesting!
Argh, too much great fic in the world. What I wouldn't give for a convenient case of mono.
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