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Games2011 ♥ FIC: Take Time To Sit And Watch The Leaves [PG]

Jun 01, 2011 19:12

Title: Take Time To Sit And Watch The Leaves
Author: ravenne_crion
Team: DOE
Rating: PG (some suggestiveness towards the end)
Wordcount: 3,860
Warnings: N/A
Prompt: A September to remember. / An October full of splendor. / A November to treasure. - La Prevenchere, Brittany, France, Entertaining Angels
Summary: A Portkey mishap turns out to be most fortuitous ( Read more... )

!2011 fic, !2011, submission: fic

Comments 16

klose June 19 2011, 10:05:48 UTC

I have to say that I adored the action/adventure in this - I'm a sucker for that stuff, specifically with respect to Lily and James and their Order work, and I don't think anyone else has tackled it in this fest. So thank you for that!

And I like your take on the prompt, as well - that they might take each other for granted midst all this war and other stuff feels so real. Like everyone else, I also enjoyed how your Lily took charge without being obnixious or overbearing (which some peopel tend to make her be!).

ravenne_crion July 2 2011, 15:39:18 UTC

Oh if you love action/adventure, I have some ideas brewing. Action/Adventure needs more love and it's the perfect setting really.

Lily obnoxious and overbearing?! Never!

Thank you for the review, klose :)

museme87 June 26 2011, 00:21:43 UTC

You definitely have a gift for writing actions scenes, mystery author! I definitely felt the urgency of the moment and very much appreciated your descriptions of James' battle strategy. Also, I liked the comment about fighting hand-to-hand; I definitely see fighting like a Muggle to be something only Muggle-borns would think of because wizards have always had wands.

I, like some of the author reviewers, also enjoyed the talk of taking each other for granted. As eprime stated, you do here about Lily and James' relationship as being this perfect thing in fanfic, which it likely wasn't given that this was war. Not to mention that they were so young and were probably thrown into the war as they were their marriage. It was great to see Lily's issues at that point in the story. Added a certain level of reality to the whole thing.

ravenne_crion July 2 2011, 15:46:40 UTC

I have never considered myself a action/adventure writer. I struggle so much with those scenes! Apparently though I have a knack for it. Thank you. I actually makes me more confidant to write some action/adventure because I have ideas but never thought I had the ability to pull it off.

Thank you for the review :)

julvett June 27 2011, 02:53:29 UTC

Cute fic! I loved the opening action sequence, it was very well done. I like how you described Lily as a 'warrior goddess', she prob looks really sexy when she's fighting, haha. Their little holiday was so romantic, I really enjoyed reading it :)

ravenne_crion July 2 2011, 15:48:58 UTC

Thank you, Julvett! That opening scene took forever to write and it's good to see that it wasn't in vain.