LJIdol 10: Topic 9: Trolley Problem

[lilmissmagic71]

Light fades. I stand in the entryway of my apartment like a statue, barely breathing. I hear him shouting again. My hand rests on the doorknob, forehead against the cool steel door. It feels comforting against my reddened face. I cry for her most days. A tear, a caught breath... a lingering look to tell her I'm sorry. She always turns away first.

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Comments

[halfshellvenus]

Oh, what an awful situation to be in.

The solution-- call the police!-- seems so simple and obvious, except that the woman is not taking the safety she and her child need, and so the aftermath is worse.

Three times is a lot of times to hope and have it fall flat, but at the same time, there's the risk the husband will someday kill his wife and/or their child.

You painted that dilemma, and the fear of the wrong choice when all the choices are bad, very strongly and emotionally here.

[dee_aar2]

The emotions of the seemingly silent but helpful spectator to the violence and trauma has been brought out so well. The decision process - whether to continue to help or ignore - the dilemma in it is clearly etched in the writing.

[murielle]

Oh! This is heartbreaking, but with victory at the end.

I love how you take us into this, slowly revealing the protagonist's dilemma.

Great take on the prompt!

[murielle]

Oh! This is heartbreaking, but with victory at the end.

I love how you take us into this, slowly revealing the protagonist's dilemma.

Great take on the prompt!