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lillysdoll

13 > Gallery of Femininity: The Abyss and What You See

Oct 11, 2005 03:22

Beverly sat alone in the dark, staring vacantly at the cigarette smoke as it ran desperately to escape in the air. She was shaking, her free hand stuck between her knees as she rocked there, trying desperately not to scream.

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digital_geisha October 11 2005, 20:11:53 UTC

perfection...

lillysdoll October 12 2005, 11:12:07 UTC

I'm glad you like it, hun.

A shame that I think it's relative crap :)

digital_geisha October 12 2005, 15:51:35 UTC

do i have to drive up there and bet you boy? "relative crap" *glares* stop that. your writting is wonderful ALL of it!

moongate October 11 2005, 21:05:38 UTC

Dangerously good.

lillysdoll October 12 2005, 11:11:33 UTC

how is that even possible?

moongate October 12 2005, 12:34:23 UTC

Saying I liked seemed inappropriate and mechanically telling you that it evoked responses. Probably the desired response for the audience to have, well that sounded trite. So I went with a catch phrase....I know. But it had a damn good descriptor....kind of.

rawwounds October 12 2005, 15:21:10 UTC

Geez. that was terrible. what tripe crap. how do you call yourself a writer?

^_^ love you!

I wanna know a few more lines about Matt. About his death, how that affected her current state. I get that it was supposed to have a vauge feel to it, just like her mind, but that was still a little too foggy.

rawwounds October 12 2005, 15:21:56 UTC

o.0 why press the button before finishing my message? who knows. maybe I'm just special.

it was awsome, however.