That's Why You Close Your Eyes: Chapter Six

Apr 20, 2010 22:25


Title: That's Why You Close Your Eyes
Author: Lilbatfacedgirl
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k/s/m, ot3, warning: violence, warning: porn with plot, character: spock, character: kirk, character: mccoy

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lilbatfacedgirl April 21 2010, 20:19:28 UTC
I am a tease, but fear not. The story isn't over and there will be plenty of opportunities for the knock down, drag out.

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the_archandroid April 21 2010, 07:42:32 UTC
Kamali rune is right, you ARE a tease, the best kind of tease, that build up was so excellently done, all these little incremental pushes against Bones psyche by Jim, by Spock, by the Bond. And OH what squirmy goodness with Spock and Jim being unable to deny themselves any longer at least. And it's fascinating because its a microcosm of what happened on the ship, but so different this time especially with Jim reaching out and touching Bones' ear (God that detail just about killed me!)
This was so funny and sweet, and sexy, and sad because everything is railing at bones to stop denying himself. Plus "The hits just kept on coming" could've potentially not worked, but somehow that one line really encapsulates leonard's frustration so well, i've taken quite a shine to it.

btw...i think i unintentionally "borrowed" this super super super ridiculously hot doc on vulcan nuzzling scene, it just WORKS.

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lilbatfacedgirl April 21 2010, 20:24:21 UTC
Oh, good, I'm glad you liked it. I was worried about not waiting but I just felt so guilty cuz I've taken so long with the past couple of chapters. Plus, I knew the first part was solid thnx to your genius.

I didn't know if this dragged too much, like Bones is once again being pissy, but I just can't imagine Leonard McCoy not making this as difficult as possible. But that's why I have you, right? If it didn't work, you'd tell me.

And borrow away. And if you're in the mood for "borrowing", just wait til next chapter! ;-)

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the_archandroid April 23 2010, 19:23:23 UTC
No the last part didn't drag, it was fun and really felt the tension. I've actually re-read it twice with a super super critical eye. I wouldn't change a thing, except perhaps to have split it into two chapters? But really, that's only a concession to the ADD nature of our society nowadays, so it's perfect

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lilbatfacedgirl April 26 2010, 02:24:27 UTC
I know, it was long, although it was actually shorter than the chapter before. This one at least fit into one post. I'm trying to reign in my wordiness.

P.S. I started your "extra scene".

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kelpietree April 21 2010, 13:47:41 UTC
ah!!! so mean to end it there. I have a thing for hurt Bones. I also have a thing for comfortBones!!!! eeeh. want more now please. do i sound insensible enough? Thanks for writing.

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lilbatfacedgirl April 21 2010, 20:26:10 UTC
I apologize for being mean. Not really...actually, I revel in your pain. Bwaaa haaa haaa!

I too love a good hurt Bones and a good comfort Bones. More of both to follow.

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thenefarius April 21 2010, 14:01:28 UTC
YES! I'm always happy to see new chapters added to this story. I'm going to have to start checking my friend's page more than I do for the next though.

(Will probably write another comment later, but had to read this on a flyby.)

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lilbatfacedgirl April 21 2010, 20:27:02 UTC
Girl, I'm happy when you're happy!

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slashyworld April 21 2010, 14:30:50 UTC
So worth the wait ! Your Len is so in character that it is almost frightening (in a good way, lol). I really loved the "He just didn’t know if it was going to lead to screaming, fist throwing, or a three-way on the dining room table" part ! What can I say ? I love your story, I love the complexity and intensity behind it. And I'm totally in love with these three men. Even before the 2009 movie, I could only picture the three of them together... I'm so glad I found this community, lol !^^

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lilbatfacedgirl April 21 2010, 20:29:15 UTC
They SOOOOO belong together. And I'm glad you're enjoying it so much. It makes me so wibbly when someone likes my characterization of Bones, cuz he's just about my favorite character ever, but I love him best when he's with his trio!

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