Non-challenge - The Old Ways

[shanaqui]

Title: The Old Ways
Characters/Pairing: Will, Bran
Rating: G
Warnings: Angst
Summary: The perfect evening was wasted on one Will Stanton.
Notes: Inspired/influenced by The Old Ways by Loreena McKennitt.

Comments

[ananda_jc]

I like the quality of your prose, but there's not enough build up before hand to make the scene truly poignant.

[shanaqui]

You'd probably find that so with a lot of my stuff, then. XD I've found I tend to play with literal moments in time rather than expanding it a little more to what is not strictly necessary.

(Whenever I wrote essays, my teachers would complain that I was surgically precise, but never expanded anything enough. I imagine the same can be said of most of my stories. It's not the aspect I've been working on lately, but I imagine I'll have to get to it soon. XD)