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elfbert in lifein1973

FIC: Necessary Evil 2b/2

Oct 05, 2007 00:31

Part 2a is here

And part 2b...

Ray sat on the wall at the back of the garden, his back to the house. He watched the colours of the sunset flare and fade as the light played on the clouds, taking long drags on his cigarette.

“You think it’ll be okay?” Marty, who was sitting next to him, suddenly asked.

“Wha’?” Ray grunted. He’d wanted to spend a bit of ( Read more... )

pairing: chris/ray, fic, ficathon 2007

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elfbert October 6 2007, 12:58:55 UTC

You're very kind - I'm glad you enjoyed. I go for a very 'real' feel - sometimes I wonder if I go into too much detail, or put in bits that probably don't need to be there for the story, but I hate it when I read things and bits are missed...so maybe I overcompensate.

Thank you for commenting XD

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space_oddity_75 October 5 2007, 11:08:34 UTC

WOW! This was absolutely brilliant! Action-packed, well-written and entertaining. I really like your style and enjoyed the plot and the character interaction very much. Bravo! :)

elfbert October 6 2007, 12:59:57 UTC

Thank you! You're very very kind. I have no idea what my style is - but I'm glad you enjoy it!

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saintvic October 5 2007, 20:17:06 UTC

*dances happily* - brilliant fic as always and a great resolution to the previous part, which of course I had to reread (such a hardship).

Great plot and very realistic with the details you throw in such as Ray's potential sympathy for the criminals, Ray and Chris relationship and, in fact, everything.

elfbert October 6 2007, 13:02:27 UTC

Thanks XD Well, I did leave it so long I wondered if anyone would remember the first part at all!

And yes, I think Ray saw Marty as a bit like Chris, only his family were wrong 'uns, so Ray saw him as saveable - he didn't really have a criminal mind or any wish to hurt others.

I'm glad you enjoyed!
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nebula99 October 5 2007, 21:06:56 UTC

twas a pleasure my dear, and anytime you want me again, just holler!

Great fic, everyone beautifully drawn and "aww" Ray & Chris.

Hurrah!

elfbert October 6 2007, 13:03:20 UTC

Thank you! It's very kind of you to offer. I just can't beta - I get so absorbed in stories I miss the mistakes XD You did a great job.

And I'm glad you enjoyed it too XD

hambelandjemima October 6 2007, 07:04:09 UTC

I'm so pleased you finished this :D

An excellent story. Tense and touching in all the right places. Ray's concern for Marty was touching - it shows that as a copper he wants to help people, not just beat up the bad guys.

Sam briefly wondered about the dangers that all the blood posed, even in these years before AIDS became the killer it was in his own time.
That's been bugging me a litle , ever since I watched one of these 'real life' policing programmes, where the the PC was telling a guy to back off because he had blood over his face. Glad you put it in :)

Ray's dream came out of nowhere! I read that Gene was on the ground, then I read it again and thought NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO. It didn't occur to me that it could be a dream, but I heaved a huge sigh of relief (and felt a little bit silly for not seeing it coming :))

I noticed the little hint towards Sam and Gene, but they were still arguing at the end over whose way was best. Very IC :D

So... to sum up, I love this fic. Thanks for posting :)

elfbert October 6 2007, 13:07:13 UTC

Bwahahaha, I took you in with the dream thingy? That's great. I worried it'd be way obvious.

As for the blood...it bugs me too, because Sam would have that ingrained in him - and suddenly he's in an era where no one knew about it. A lot of things like that seem sometimes to be missed, both in the series and in fic. I'm sure I miss plenty too, cos I wasn't even born in the 70s, but I like to try XD

I'm really glad you enjoyed this - it means a lot!

Thanks for taking the time to FB.

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