FICATHON FIC 2012: BROKEN, PART 2, DEBL_NS, SAM/GENE, BLUE CORTINA

[debl_ns]

Title: Broken, Part 2
Author: debl_ns; beta read bymargo_kim
Rating: Blue Cortina
Word Count: 4425 entire fic
Summary: see notes
Notes: Written for lifein1973's Ficathon 2012, using basaltgrrl's prompt Sam gets two broken arms somehow, goes with my series of "two broken arms" artworks, serious or comedic as you wish. Preferences: It's great when you can capture two sides of

Comments

[fern_tree]

Awwwwwwww, this is lovely! :D The description of the accident was fantastic! And oh Sam, you crafty bugger XD I don't blame Gene for getting his revenge afterwards, even though Gene kind of deserved it for driving that madly in the first place XD

It's wonderful! :D

[debl_ns]

Thanks, fern ... I had a lot of fun with the accident scene, and their arguing back and forth. Thanks for reading. :-)

[basaltgrrl]

Oh my GOD, deb! That is too awesome! Wow, you got *everything* in there, didn't you? Holy crap!

I must admit, when the nail polish came out I was taken by surprise, and I shouldn't have been, but ---eeee! The shifting layers of mood and emotion and caring and frustration! gene baring his soul! Sam taking the piss! I love that beans on toast really is Gene's idea of a special dinner. Hee hee. Your writing is so rooted in reality, in sensations. And your dialogue lawyer sparkles.

Yay!

[debl_ns]

Okay, this is so lovely that my heart just expanded and is now floating away happily, like a helium balloon ... thank you.

[basaltgrrl]

I did want to say that the action descriptions were fab, and I loved the moment when Sam whimpers and Gene thinks for a moment that its the dog.

[little_cello]

Alright, this made me laugh out loud twice. Once at Sam's deception, and second at Gene's revenge. xD Oh, not to forget their bickering in the beginning. Loved this! A touch of angst, but then a really great humourous twist. Jesus I'm still giggling like a madwoman over "twinkle-toes" xDDDDD But kudos to Sam for catching onto it so quickly, even in his groggy state.

[debl_ns]

Oh my, what a nice comment. *smiles* I had basaltgrrl's artwork for inspiration, and I decided to work the painting of nails in as revenge. I'm glad you liked it. Thank you!

[margo_kim]

I'm sure by this point that you know everything I think about every part of this story ;) I still love their bickering, it's my favorite part of the story. They are both so prickly and determined to be tough and gruff and underneath they're such softies--albeit devious, underhanded softies. Such a lovely, funny examination of their relationship and why you should never, ever cross either of them.

[debl_ns]

Thank you, and your comments and suggestions were so helpful. I enjoy writing dialogue, especially for Sam and Gene, and it's generally my favourite in anyone's fic. It was fun going for a little bit of humour this time, including it with more poignant emotions. Thanks again.

[severinne]

Hehe, that was fun. Loved the energy of that crazy car chase and their pitch-perfect bickering. And yes, even if it was Gene's fault, good on him getting revenge after Sam faked that amnesia ;)

[debl_ns]

Thank you very much. The car chase and their bickering was my favourite as well, and I really enjoyed the insults Sam got in while he had the excuse of no memory, the rascal.