Fic: Upon Ourselves

[entangled_now]

Title:  Upon Ourselves
Author: Corona
Fandom: Dr. Horrible
Pairing: Dr. Horrible/Captain Hammer
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: In no way mine or anything to do with me. I own nothing.
Summary: "Are we pretending we don't know each other?" Captain Hammer says smoothly.
AN: For

Comments

[entangled_now]

I love it when I can make people enthusiastic about fic, so that means a lot to me! And I ended up with two Dr. Horrible prompts so the second one should be up fairly soon.

I loved that idea that DR. Horrible was more real than Billy was and Billy was starting to feel like the disguise, and I thought it would be neat to have Hammer suggest that he'd always seen it that way. I'm really glad you enjoyed that too!

Hammer is so close to being human when he's confused, I can't resist :D

You posted the Adam/YED fic! :D

[master_kogane]

Captain Hammer frowns at him.

"You're evil, aren't you supposed to let me, aren't you supposed to want things like that?"
How dark and twisted! *evil delight*

But then Captain Hammer touches him, one brief, confused gesture and Billy stops breathing completely. When he looks up the expression on Hammer's face is strangely defensive. Billy thinks maybe he broke Hammer in ways he didn't even realise. And he doesn't know what to do with this, doesn't even know what it is.
If I were to make a list of your top paragraphs don't look at me like that, this one would SO be in the Top 5. Amazing!

[entangled_now]

Why thank you! I love dark and twisted! Also evil delight is my favourite sort of delight!

Awh, that's so kind of you! They just have such screwed up supervillain/superhero tension that I can't resist making them be awkward and kind of abusive with each other. I'm so glad you liked it :D

[master_kogane]

They just have such screwed up supervillain/superhero tension that I can't resist making them be awkward and kind of abusive with each other.

You do realize that this comment only makes us all go: YAY, SHE'LL WRITE MOAR OF THEM, right? <3

[entangled_now]

I admit to nothing *shifty look*

I'm working on their second prompt, which I'm trying to be strange and different with, at the moment I can't decide whether to add pr0n *doodles*

[zeitheist]

But then Captain Hammer touches him, one brief, confused gesture and Billy stops breathing completely. When he looks up the expression on Hammer's face is strangely defensive. Billy thinks maybe he broke Hammer in ways he didn't even realise.

That is such an intensely powerful paragraph (I just wrote 'powergraph', there. Yes, that's exactly what it is!). Not only is the image of them both very visually vivid, but it's just heartbreaking - Billy finally got what he wanted, broke Captain Hammer, and he doesn't even know how.

I have a massive kink for jaw-grabbing, so that was particularly appreciated.

Mostly, I just loved this. I liked the brittle tone. I also have to commend your ability to make me sympathise with Captain Hammer - a feat nobody else has accomplished.

[entangled_now]

Thank you very much, I know some people have complained that Captain Hammer especially is fairly two dimensional but I'm kind of fascinated by the pair of them and their weird destructive relationship. I honestly enjoy writing them scenes together. And your comment about sympathising with Captain Hammer I'm going to take as a huge compliment, because I really, really want to make him real, so thank you for that!

[entangled_now]

Thank you very much! I had fun with defensive, angry and confused Captain Hammer, he's fun to play with when he's a real, live boy! \o/

[miya_morana]

All right, one of these days I'll read one of you fics at a decent hour and be able to make a constructive commentary like these deserve. But as usual it's past midnight and I'm exhausted, so I'll just say that I loved it. It's the most important, isn't it? :)

[entangled_now]

Lol! This is not a terrible conspiracy on my part, I promise!

But yes, it's always fantastic to know people like things, so thank you very much! :D