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lezzerlee

The Consequences of Trust (Part 5)

Mar 24, 2011 04:24

Warnings: Suicide Themes
Author's notes: If you for some reason haven't been informed, there is a companion WIP to this piece from Eames point of view.
Beta(s): space_raider182
Disclaimer: This story/artwork is based on characters and situations created and owned by the Christopher Nolan and Warner Bros. No money is being made and no copyright or ( Read more... )

suicide, angst, arthur/eames, fic, inception, inception kink

Comments 28

nyogu March 24 2011, 12:42:38 UTC

o_o But you c-can't KILL my baby...Fix it. RIght now. This is amazing, but you need to fix it.

lezzerlee March 24 2011, 21:17:33 UTC

What do you mean I can't kill him? I killed him once already.
Ok. Ok, it was just a dream but...

;)

And thank you.

nyogu April 7 2011, 16:54:07 UTC

It's a dream, it wasn't PERMANENT!

Moar please.

osaki_nana_707 March 24 2011, 12:56:28 UTC

OH NO, ARTHUR, NO!

These damned cliffhangers! D:

lezzerlee March 24 2011, 21:16:34 UTC

Right! NO Arthur NO!!
It's not the way.

rainbowsbanging March 24 2011, 14:15:08 UTC

Eames better be there. Oh my freaking gosh.

lezzerlee March 24 2011, 21:16:01 UTC

We'll see...

I don't know yet truthfully. There are two ways I can see this going. Decisions, decisions.

ze_zebra March 24 2011, 16:18:49 UTC

OH! You're full of cliffhangers. No fair.

(Just a couple of things: Le marais and you can drop the basilique, just "le Sacré-Cœur" is fine.)

lezzerlee March 24 2011, 21:15:02 UTC

Thank you! Changing those right now. It's hard knowing what things actually are called when you've never been.

ze_zebra March 25 2011, 12:19:06 UTC

Just glad you're updating!

efcia March 24 2011, 18:10:02 UTC

I could say that it's not Arthur the way I see him: in my imagination Arthur is more resistant. But honestly I've read many stories where characterization isn't exactly like my imagination and if the story is well-written it doesn't matter. Your story is definitely well-written, so I won't complain about characterization.
This chapter is heart-breaking, especially the fragment where Arthur realizes how bad his state is. I think I agree with nyogu: you have to fix it!

lezzerlee March 24 2011, 21:13:52 UTC

You know what's so strange? He's nothing like my head canon here either. It's just where the story went for me.

Like his in charge and logical decision making self went, well fuck, I'm dangerous and out of control and I can't go to the loony bin, guess the only thing to do is put myself down.

It's less the "I feel sorry for myself" kind of thing. Does that make sense?

efcia March 24 2011, 22:18:33 UTC

Of course it makes sense! And, because of that, it's more sad. When you feel sorry for yourself it means that probably someone can comfort you and you let this person do so. When you feel so out of control... Well, I don't see many ways of escape.
Funny thing, sometimes story can bring you somewhere you've never planned to be.

lezzerlee March 24 2011, 23:53:20 UTC

They really can. I came in with a pretty good outline for the story, but the ending was always vague or too rushed. So it's like I'm letting it write itself while trying to not make it too easy. Because I hate rushed endings.