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FIC for sarahetc: "Improvisational Chemistry"

Mar 30, 2009 17:43

Title: Improvisational Chemistry
Author: lavinialavender
Recipient: sarahetc
Rating: PG
Word count: ~3,000
Warnings: none
Summary: Home from Hogwarts after fifth year, Lily and Severus attempt to work out where they stand with each other.
Disclaimer: Characters and world not mine, etc.
Author's Notes: Thanks to R. for brainstorming and cheerleading and everything. Hope ( Read more... )

round_2009, fic

Comments 9

sarahetc March 31 2009, 00:29:06 UTC

Oooh! Brewing fic! With litany of ingredients! Glee!

Lily raised her eyebrows. Never breaking eye contact, she reached into her short pockets, held up a lighter, and flicked it on.

Severus' lips twitched unmistakably, though nothing else in his expression changed, but her own lips turned up in response.

I can see this so clearly. Wonderful.

He rubbed his hand across his glistening forehead absently, frowning as he always did at potions. "Usually, the use of salamander's blood with this sort of base needs to be offset with fluxweed, lovage, or some other type of flora with similar properties. As we are without, and only have the much more potent asphodel as a substitute...I say we put the asphodel in first and add the blood as soon as it disintegrates."

Yes, let's!

"So says the potions prodigy."

He caught her eye at that; she smiled, and though he didn't quite reciprocate, she recognized a look in his eye which she could almost call affectionate. It was the first snap of connection they had felt in a long time.It's so vivid and ( ... )

lavinialavender April 11 2009, 04:22:23 UTC

I'm so glad you liked it! Thank you for all the specific details complimented.

randomneses March 31 2009, 02:56:05 UTC

Awesomesauce. Seriously, I really enjoyed this and the water bit was perfect :3

shyfoxling April 1 2009, 05:44:51 UTC

Sev, she thought, Sev, Sev, Severus. Hers. That's what he had shown her that night. [...] she wanted to smooth out his forehead and see if she could find again what was beneath when he looked at her.

Oh, indeed. This. This +3.

lavinialavender April 11 2009, 04:24:05 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

closetravenclaw April 1 2009, 08:28:39 UTC

Wonderful fic of them working together--and potions. Thanks for this.

lavinialavender April 11 2009, 04:25:00 UTC

Thank you for comenting! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

xnymphadorax April 2 2009, 17:38:53 UTC

This moment is so quietly tense. It's crucial to everything yet they both behave as one would expect two 16-year-olds to act. Slightly awkward, a little childish and braver than you'll probably ever be again in life. I loved that.

This line gave me so much joy:
He crouched on the bank out of the water's reach, his lank black hair half obscuring his face. Sev, she thought, Sev, Sev, Severus. Hers. That's what he had shown her that night. And looking at him now, huddled down in his dark clothes and worn shoes against the green life behind him, she knew why she hadn't been able to let him go, why she could never abandon him to those around him.

lavinialavender April 11 2009, 04:26:00 UTC

I'm so glad it worked for you! And thanks for the specific detail you liked best.