Dodging Lessons: A:tLA

[lepharus]

Series: Avatar: the Last Airbender
Word Count: ~1400
Rating: PG
Characters: light Zuko/Aang
Summary: Zuko asks Aang for a fighting lesson. Written for 7snogs for the prompt 'belt'.
Warnings: Fluff, it's kinda corny
A/N:  Okay, totally not sure if I want to actually post this thing.  I think the only reason I'm doing it is because I kind of worked on it for a

Comments

[lepharus]

Thank you! I would be flattered! c: I was worried that Aang kissing him might have felt like it came out of nowhere, or something.

[insanitystorm]

o3o
New fic!
I liked it, the whole training/fighting was pulled of smoothly on your part, as the timing was very good.
For some crit, I felt that you used a lot of 'makes him feel's and etc.
Nice job, now you can finally say you have more that one fandom on here :3

[lepharus]

Yeah, trying to be more productive... we'll see how that goes, haha.
Thank you! And I think I see what you're talking about, I probably use 'feel' too much in general.
Aren't you proud?? :3

[dracomaleficium]

Awwww, that was so sweet. Exactly what I think the general appeal of Zukaang is - these two are utterly cute together, their dynamics is so heartwarming and adorkable at the same time. This was definitely present here. Heck, this short piece is nearly made of adorable Zukaang essence and it made me smile.

I actually have no criticism to offer - the kiss didn't feel awkward and random to me, though the fic wouldn't probably be harmed by a little more exposition, some introvertic musing on Aang's part to preceed it. But as it's in Aang's nature to act on his instincts before he can think about it, it was perfectly okay. And both of them were in character, the situation was well-established and beautifully described, the pace was just-right, the dialogue lively and engaging and all the necessary feeling was there. So good job, I hope to see some more for the ATLA fandom from you, whether it's Zukaang or something else!

[lepharus]

Eee, thank you so much for this lovely comment! I'm having an annoying day and this cheered me up. c: Haha yes, I was definitely drawn to Zukoaang by the cuteness factor. Zuko's a dork, Aang's a dork, they get on well together. I just like their dynamic, and I'd really like to explore it more!

I think I originally had Aang thinking a little bit more into the kiss, but, I dunno... Whenever I try to write musing over something like that, I have a hard time finding the right words to make it sound natural and not cheesy. I feel like I turn all kisses cheesy. XD Or I make it seem like some huge build up where the kiss is big deal when it's not what I was going for. I should practice that more. c:
And I hope to write a lot more for Avatar. In fact, I have a whole table with 7 prompts that I'll be writing Zukaang for. :D

[lepharus]

Oh jeez haha, that is a really great compliment! I'm very glad to have gotten you into this pairing. c: They are very adorable, I love them for their cuteness. Thank you! Very glad to have another Zukaang shipper :D