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[leilani666]

"talking"

line - Change in POV

Prowl's Origin

Chapter 4:

Prowl knew it was bound to happen. Sure, he had watched and supervised the human soldiers when they came to the base, but they were mere workers and not one of the few considered part of the team. What surprised him was that the first one he met was not among the possibilities he

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[delilahdraken]

And the story gets better and better. I like how Prowl/Barricade doesn't really trust the other bots, but still is trusting in them. I cannot imagine what a bang it will be when he gets his memory back.

Anyway, I bow before your art.

[leilani666]

Thanks! Glad you like it.

[dairokkan]

One minor correction/suggestion: "Trying not to think how close he’d been to strap(PING) Pro… Barricade to the medical table and put(TING) him in stasis lock until he could verify his (RE?)programming."

I'm surprised they didn't clue the humans in on what they'd done. I have a feeling that was a mistake. If they don't know they can't censor themselves, and sooner or later either Sam or Mikaela will make a careless comment that triggers a memory. They may also realize who his is if/when they recognize his holoform...

Having Mikaela remind Barricade/Prowl of Frenzy is a nice touch though, and I think it helps lay the early groundwork for a potential friendship between them. Assuming Barricade actually liked Frenzy, that is. ;)

Whatever direction you end up taking, I hope you keep going!

[leilani666]

Fixed! Thanks for the help!

I want to say something about why they kept quiet about it, but since I was planning on writing about it later on I won't spoil myself. I thought only Sam got to see his holoform. I may be wrong. I need to watch the movie again. *is using it as excuse to watch it again =D*

Glad you like the Mikaela reminds Barricade of Frenzy. Maybe I'll make another chapter with only the two of them. I still don't know how Ratchet ended up stealing the chapter.

[dairokkan]

I think you're right about the holoform. I should have said "Sam may also realize..."

I think it'll be very interesting to see how it all turns out. Even if Barricade does ultimately remember who he is, depending on the circumstances he might decide, hey, what the hell. Megatron being dead and all, what else is he going to do with himself? By then he may also have gotten to know the 'Bots a bit, and thus be more divided in his loyalties.
I expect he'll be pissed about the reprogramming though, which means lots of angsty goodness and conflicting emotions to wrestle with.

I've said it before, but this fic's concept really is a brilliant idea.

[leilani666]

LOL I'm still using it as an excuse to watch it again. XP

I'd tell you if he remembers but it's a secret. As far as I know, everyone wants him to remember. And angst is always good, even though I don't think I write good angst. @_@

[nova_myth]

LOL, nice Mikeala! I love how she caught Ratchet off guard. Should be interesting when the truth is revealed.

[leilani666]

Somehow almost every time I write her she ends up doing that. Glad you're like the story so far. =D

[_sixshot_]

It's priceless! Great!!! :)
I hope for more interactions between Mikaela and Prowl/Barricade.
A nice explanation - 'The glitch'. Covers almost everything... ;)
I enjoy your story :)
Thank you

[leilani666]

Glad you like it!
I'll probably write another chapter with Mikaela and Prowl/Cade and without Ratchet in it so he can't interrupt them.

'The glith' is the anwer to everything. ^__^

Thanks for reading.

[mmouse15]

I've been too busy...I'm sorry it's taken me so long to get here, especially since it's an awesome chapter! I love Mikaela here, and that she reminds Prowl of Frenzy. Ratchet - I could almost see him twitching there. This is a great story!

[leilani666]

*hugs* Don't worry, I've been there.
Glad you like it so far. I'm planning to write another chapter with Mikaela. This time without Ratchet the chaperon in it. ^_^