Fic: yes the heart should always go one step too far

[leigh57]

title: yes the heart should always go one step too far
word count: 499
disclaimer: By now, you guys all know that my mind on Jack and Renee is the poor egg on drugs (work with me). 'Nuf said.
warnings: show spoilers, references to suicidal thoughts and self-harm

This is for you, ws_scribe, with Christmas love and wishes for deployment that's as good as it

Comments

[alwaysashipper]

This was amazing. I can't even describe it. You have such an incredible way with words, and you're so connected to these characters... It threw me right into it, and very vividly. I'm almost surprised it's sunny outside. :)

So much fail for not finishing What If You Catch Me, Where Would We Land yet. I need a vacation.

[leigh57]

Rinat! *glomps and squishes* It makes me all smiley to see you in my LJ this morning! Thank you so much. As I always say, if I manage to do something cool with words for these two, I 100% write it off to bleeding character love on the page and getting lucky.

And stop. You do not fail for not reading that epic . . . WHATEVER. It's a freakin' novel.

You do need a vacation, without a doubt. Whenever it gets cold here, I think of you and how I plan to picspam if we ever get some freakin' snow. I hope you've had a great weekend:)

[siricerasi]

Gosh, so lovely. Renee I want to give you a huge hug.

A walking checklist of therapist-pleasing perfection.

Just gotta say this made me LOL.

[leigh57]

Renee I want to give you a huge hug.

Yeesh, I always want to give her a hug. When you're on 24, your damn life sucks even before they kill you!

And it's possible that some of my own snark works its way into my Renee characterization, although I feel overall as if it can be supported by canon evidence. Exhibit A:

[adrenalin211]

There are about ten thousand reasons why this is amazing, first of which is the way you manage, even when economizing words and drabbling it up, to include these details that bring color to the picture. We're talking lipstick and bran flakes, cocoa puffs to feel decadent, the gut-wrenching way you state, so frakkin' simply, that it's hardest to want to live. You could have been so goddamn dramatic about it, written a whole story of emo self-pity, but this isn't that story. It's just...there. Like truth italicized.

A walking checklist of therapist-pleasing perfection.---Yes! That is SO Renee, you know? She would do ALL the things herself, and then be like... meh. Well pft. I can just SEE THIS IN MY HEAD.

She thinks about the song.

Subtracts the "with you" part. -- I love this line here. Not just that it's here, but the suggestions of what's not here. How you subtly sneak that in and bring it back later when there's not a single reason to smile. Next step? Call Jack! Duh.

AC/DC creating unfortunate slant rhyme.-- Your details

[leigh57]

You wrote me a comment that's longer than the story! Goodness.

I'm typing this and glancing up occasionally to watch the .gif above, and what I observe is a thing that will astonish you. I really fucking love Renee.

*pauses while you find the smelling salts to recover from your shocked swoon*

LIKE DUDE. I have ten thousand Jack/Renee prompts at the end of the month and it would make so much more sense to write the one for today about Beverly and Jean-Luc, but I get my brain going and just GUH. Why are they so . . . words I don't know?

ANYWAY. I'm thrilled that my shaky attempts to toss these out there are not total duds. You know that in all twelve gajillion of my happy AUs, they're either together or get there through fun and UST-filled circuitous routes so . . . yeah.

I just hope everyone doesn't die of cheese before Christmas gets here. ♥

[adrenalin211]

Your little bouncy guy says that he feels "loved". Why does that make my heart all happy? I love it.

You should definitely keep going on this idea though! You can do it drabblistically again. That would be fine by me. Definitely a continuation though. The flist wants what the flist wants, homeskillet.

I am glad you gave me twelve gajillion AUs.

[iolanthe95]

::happy bounce:: You almost make me glad to be home-bound with the crud that won't die.

[leigh57]

Argh, the crud that won't die sucks -- we have a fun form in my house this week. Feel better!

And thank you so much for reading:)

Sorry I just had to quote this part

[adrenalin211]

A walking checklist of therapist-pleasing perfection.

She’s still stuck in the middle.

She thinks about the song.

Subtracts the "with you" part.

That is all.

Re: Sorry I just had to quote this part

[leigh57]

Aw, remember that time when I used to write stuff with the actual intent of posting it?

Yeah, me neither;)

Dude, I love all of our AUs so much. Even if we do totally need another one for the not getting shot but still S8 thing. Ahahahahaha. <333

Re: Sorry I just had to quote this part

[adrenalin211]

Lol. I remember that time! It was just a few days ago!

I love reading your writing. And rereading it.