It's December 1st! I can't even stand how much I love the Christmas season and I'm pretty sure nobody else can stand it either. But since it's the first, here is my first attempt at Christmas!fic. For a complete list of what you have to dread horribly look forward to, see
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The moving grain of the wood and how you can just FEEL Karen's exhaustion through your description, the shorter heeled pumps, Bill ordering Indian food (just the IDEA of that. UGH), the way he calls her gorgeous and mumbles that he misses her, the detail about the microwaved chicken-broccoli alfredo and how he knew he was gonna fall asleep with the TV ON (again, just the IDEA of that. BILL!), the way we get to have Bill all teasing and gently serious and really sick of missing his wife, the interlocked fingers, the way she stops to do something considerate for him, just how she's imagining ALL of what it will be like to come home, the home for the holiday candle, NPR and the way it compliments her Christmas tunes station (details, MY GOD. Your details are amazing) The line "a warm, curved X of connection" and "concentrate on what's important."
Once again, you just amaze me.
Now I want to go read the Gregory Bill Unicorn that shits sparkles fic by J. #AMAZINGSAUCE.
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Whut?
Aw anyway, you know how all this crap is stressing out my totally uncreative brain, but hey. I'm making a go of what I can. Not gonna lie -- I would kill to have one canon scene between Bill and Karen when they're already together but the world isn't ending. Woe. I'm glad you enjoyed:)
p.s. Dude wtf? Don't give ME credit for the her bringing him wine thing. That was your idea!
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I miss Gregory Bill so much. I think he's still stuck in Uranus.
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I particularly loved:
...and pushed her reluctant, aching feet into her shoes.
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You're right -- it's Not-So-Inner! My bad;) But I'm glad if I smuffled it just a tiny bit.
The shoe line just reminded me of the way I used to feel at the end of the day at my office job -- totally! Thanks so much for the comment:)
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Wonderful job. Echoing the above comment of how well you wrote Karen's exhaustion; all those little touches in prose made me vaguely dizzy with that oh-god-when-was-the-last-time-I-slept tilt-a-whirl of fatigue. But, overall, this fic left me warm. Even cozy, in that simple way Bill/Karen always had.
♥
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While a million things on 24 broke my heart, one of the biggest things that broke my shipper heart was not having more Bill/Karen time. Next to Jack and Renee, I shipped them more than anyone on the show. I honestly feel as if I'm pretty clunky at writing them, but it was fun to try, and it makes me smile that you feel I got the details of the way they relate to one another right.
Mostly, I would have loved a couple scenes like this. Although I have to say for James Morrison and Jayne Atkinson -- they did so much with those phone calls in S6. It was fantastic! Ahahaha. Listen to me ramble away. The short version is thanks for reading and taking the time to comment!
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Ditto.
One of my not-so-favorite pastimes was gearing up for the season premier of a brand new 24 day, and finding out what/how much they skipped over. There was definite shouting at my screen for moar Bill/Karen. I am right there with you on your shipping preferences, man! And I think when you really love a pairing, it's hard to be "clunky" writing them. You most certainly weren't. :)
Mostly, I would have loved a couple scenes like this. Although I have to say for James Morrison and Jayne Atkinson -- they did so much with those phone calls in S6.
YESSSSSS. ALL THE CAPSLOCK.
Feel free to write more scenes like this, as I certainly won't complain. :D?
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I love Jayne Atkinson more than I love Helen Mirren. Is that super weird?
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Okay, S. I am running -- legit, like, running out of the office to hit the gym, but. I just. My eyes are not-so-tiny hearts. You don't even know, man.
(I didn't realize I missed fantastic Bill/Karen until this very moment. Ahhhhh.)
I will be more coherent within the next handful of hours! Really! Meantime, just know that my heart grew three sizes, okay.
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BUT. I am so glad you have ♥s in your eyes, because they give me ♥s in my eyes.
And you go with the gym. Missed mine today because the plumbers were here, and I feel like a giant slug!
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You have more than done them justice, sweets. I love them in these tiny still-frames, when the world isn't ending and nobody's on a ticking clock. Seeing 24 characters in the quiet times, all hushed and kind and wrapped up in self-aware gratefulness, is one of my weaknesses. The fact that it's Bill/Karen here is ganache on the cappuccino-fudge cheesecake.
Yeek, I hope the thing with the plumbers went well. :| (Things like this are why being a legit homeowner scares the ever-loving fuck out of me.)
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Yes, the writing them thing is so stressful. I'm always curious about why some characters are easier to get inside than others. I don't think I could write Tony and/or Michelle if I tried, fer serious.
Oh, the plumbing thing will be all fine. Mostly it's just a pain in the ass. The real concern is the ever-migrating front porch steps . . . :/
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NOT TRUE I CAN BECAUSE THE CHRISTMAS SEASON IS WONDERFUL.
Karen stared, entranced, watching the swirling curves of wood grain move like tiny snakes, foggy and blurred at the edges. Like Adrienne said, you did SUCH a good job of expressing just how tired Karen was here, as well as with this: she'd reached that stage of exhaustion where things like walking in a straight line and achieving subject/verb agreement required constant focus
She recognized the voice (smooth warm rumble that made her smile even when he was doing something as banal as ordering Indian food over the phone) aksjhfkjahfakj SQUEE I love them so much! And Bill falling asleep on the couch holding the remote and the note that he left her about leaving food for her in the fridge and to wake him up before she went to bed is SO CUTE I can't even. I actually teared up reading that /sappy dork
He reached for her arm, quick stroke of his thumb up the inside of her ( ... )
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Meh, I don't wanna make you tear up, but if I do I hope they're good happy tears, because this is supposed to be snuggly Christmas fic that makes everyone smile on their brother everybody come together try and love one another right now.
Wow. You'd think I was drunk. And I'm not even a little. OY.
IN SHORT. I'm so glad you liked this. I felt so damn shaky writing them, because it's not what I usually do. And Jack and Renee in their Santa hats! Dammit! I have to upload more Christmas icons:)
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Also, LOL at your Youngbloods reference. I love that song!
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