Comments | leanstein: Fic: The Long Way Back [PG]

leanstein

Fic: The Long Way Back [PG]

Jan 25, 2011 09:54

She dreams.

Death. Destruction. The Wraith. Atlantis in shambles.

Then she dreams some more.

Of being saved. Of going home.

She’s not sure how much time has passed, or if it really matters, but she’s tired. She doesn’t expect to be, not with all the nanites in her body, but she is so very very tired.

There is a thin line between ( Read more... )

sparky, fic: sheppard/weir, pairing: john/elizabeth, char: john sheppard, pairing: sheppard/weir, char: elizabeth weir, fic

Comments 9

anonymous January 25 2011, 10:39:05 UTC

If only it could have been this way. Love this story. Any chance of a sequel?

leanstein February 4 2011, 00:09:57 UTC

thank you! Hahaha I haven't even thought of that. We'll see, if inspiration strikes, why not? :DD

thanks!

lavenderseaslug January 25 2011, 18:38:58 UTC

This was lovely. I like that, even if it's Christmas-y and all that, you didn't give up the inherent angst that comes along with the prompt.

When they found her, John feared it was too late.

He still dreams about that too.
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She gets this look in her eyes sometimes, when she thinks nobody is watching. This look that says she’s not quite sure if all of this is real. That she’s back in Atlantis.

He knows she dreams. Dreams of times when they saved her, but it all turned out to be an illusion. He curses himself for not finding her sooner. For not looking for her.

Those two bits were probably my favorite. I like that you didn't just focus on Elizabeth's point of view, but you also deal with John's guilt about everything. This was so cohesive and lovely and the theme of smiles throughout was a nice touch and yes. Lovely.

leanstein February 4 2011, 00:13:47 UTC

thanks sweetie! I really appreciate it. :DDDD

glad you liked it!

anr January 26 2011, 01:48:01 UTC

Nicely written. I enjoyed reading this. :)

leanstein February 4 2011, 00:14:19 UTC

thank you! coming from you, this means a lot! :DDDD

lullabymoon February 1 2011, 15:23:43 UTC

♥ ♥ %hearts; I love this! So lovely and beautiful and that ending is just so sweet.

leanstein February 4 2011, 00:15:26 UTC

Thank you darling!!!! <33333

shepweiralways March 15 2011, 20:25:48 UTC

The greatest loss of SCI FI history and you nailed it perfectly. I can't express enough how much I enjoyed this. It was so easy to feel their deep pain and sadness of what could have been. I always thought his not going after her was even more ridiculous then him leaving without her in the first place. Those stupid PTB, such idiots what they sacrificed was the best leader and I think best character on all the SGA shows. I am crying at the loss of SPARKY. You truly touched my heart. 10 stars, well presented, beautifully expressed