STR | Kirk/Spock | Riverside | Part 2 of 4

[laylafic]

Title: Riverside, Part 2 of 4
Author: ayesakara aka laylafic
Series: Star Trek Reboot
Rating: NC-17
Word Count: ~39,400 (total), 10,425 (this part)
Warnings: Some possibly triggery references to child physical abuse in the past
Genre: Pre-slash, Friendship, First Time, Angst, Fluff
Summary: The Enterprise is docked at Earth Station McKinley for repairs

Comments

[putigress2012]

I love the interactions between Jim and Spock. And between Spock and Winona. I think you portrayed them very realistically.

I just wish Jim and Winona could get along and work some of their issues out... *sigh* I hold out hope for the next two chapters.

[laylafic]

I enjoyed writing those interactions very much too, so I'm thrilled you find them realistic.

Angst is fun, isn't it? ;)

[karmic_fic]

you know what was pure genius? you having winona call jim on being a marshmallow.... seriously, i think that scene is going to stick in my brain forever, just PRICELESS

[laylafic]

Haha, thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed that. :)

[awarrington]

Oh, this was a painful chapter to read. So many strong emotions, so many unresolved tensions between mother and son. Clearly the issues are very deep-seated and aren't going to magically disappear. And Spock, so stoically standing up for his friend.

Interesting that Winona picked up on Spock's feelings. She's given him advice, the question is will he act on it.

I'm enjoying your writing - you're doing the dynamics between the three of them really well. It all feels very realistic.

And now, even if Jim wants to leave, he can't. They're snowed in.

On to the next chapter...

It's 12:45...I knew this was going to be a late night...

[laylafic]

Thank you so much for letting me know the character dynamics felt realistic to you. The dialogues were the first thing to come to me, but I wrote them so far back in time - literally about 2 months ago - and then there was a huge gap during which I did nothing, except sit on those scraps of dialogues written in a notebook by hand.

When I finally started writing the narration around them, I wasn't sure if they even worked anymore.

So, yeah, thanks. :)

Obviously

[elfqueen55]

you have talent on loan from God...and you KNOW how to smoothly construct a story and build real life into and around your characters...this is where the story gets so could I CAN NOT PUT IT DOWN...I'm reading it online and that's something I never, ever do, I usually print online stories out so I can curl up in my favorite chair with a piping hot mug of cocoa, but I am so rooted into this story and all of its fabulously created tension and complexity (without which, imho, no K/S story is worth even reading, I like my K/S MATURE) that I cannot turn away...on to Part 3, and yes you do seem to like 'em nice and long...another feature I absolutely enjoy and demand! :)

Re: Obviously

[laylafic]

Thank you so, so much for reading it, and enjoying it. I'm thrilled you find the character dynamics realistic. I agree, K/S needs that complexity of plot and characterization to be enjoyable. That's my fav kind too. I'm glad you enjoyed this.

Re: Obviously

[elfqueen55]

teehee...you have NO idea how much...mmmm...way too good...I especially resonate to your take on the dominant factors in Spock's personality...he's powerful, confident and very well aware of his actions, along with his own desires, human though they may seem, imho those same "feelings" are very much part of being a Vulcan...great the way you can demonstrate that reality without diluting or subverting his character...brilliant!

Re: Obviously

[laylafic]

Dom!Spock is my favorite too. Well, so is vulnerable!Spock. I just absolutely adore this guy. This... complex duality of the character, his constant struggle between his Vulcan and human halves, is delicious to play with. :)

[tprillahfiction]

oh my gosh you captured the emotions here perfectly. I was horrified at Frank. The very vivid description of his abuse of Jim was perfect. I can only imagine it must be very very difficult to come back to this house. I don't think I could do that, actually. I wouldn't be able to face the ghosts. I'm glad Jim's got Spock with him.

I can really feel the winter tone of this. I really like this.

I also love the characterizations here: Kirk, Spock, Winona. All perfect.
Really great chapter!

[laylafic]

Thank you for letting me know the emotions impacted you the way they did. I'm glad the characterizations make sense to you.