2007 Moonridge stories

[laurie_ky]

Moonridge 2007 stories

pat_k's challenge was ) Think about Jim’s line at the end of “Cypher”, when Blair joked about getting a tattoo: “Let me tell you something. You get a tattoo and your blessed protector's going to kick your ass down seven flights to the lobby.” Isn’t that an oddly strong reaction/remark coming from one guy addressing another male

Comments

[janedavitt]

These were all wonderful, Laurie. Loved the first two (possessive Jim or Blair hit all my buttons) and the third was just chilling but so well done.

How like Blair to remember that remark of Jim's and relate it to the case; he's got such an intuitive brain. And the way you worked the legend in was perfect.

[laurie_ky]

Thanks for the detailed feedback. I had fun bouncing Jim around in his head.

Chilling is good -- since I was going for a horror kind of story.
Blair wouldn't miss a trick, that's for sure. And I'm glad you enjoyed how Blair told Jim about the demon. I read a lot about different demons until I found one that would work for this story.
Thanks for reading and commenting,
Laurie

[bumpkin_is]

Laurie, these were great! The first was just - yum - growly is always good. *g*

And that second one, that was really neat - a bit on the creepy and terrifying side - but still rather neat, and it dovetailed so nicely with the first. Cool stuff. :)

keep penning,
Marns
~pN

[laurie_ky]

I'm glad you enjoyed Jim wrestling with his primal impulses.

And I'm glad the story struck you as creepy and scary, as that was the effect I was going for. Heck, it creeps me out every time I re-read it.

Thanks for reading and commenting,
Laurie

[weggsley]

These are great! I love how they all link together, and I found the first drabble in particular to be really emotionally powerful. What a novel treatment this whole cycle is of the tattoo issue.

Hm, sounds like a bit of foreshadowing there, right at the end of the final snippet. I could totally imagine a case story arising where a body has been found burned with a peacock feather atop it, and Jim (and Blair, since he did the research) recognise the scenario for what it is. How would Simon take it, do you think, if they tell him the perp they are looking for is a demon? ::winks::

[laurie_ky]

It's interesting that you and Marns saw a relationship between the first story and the second. I didn't consciously write them that way, but after reading your comment and hers, I realized that they could work together. What a reader brings to the story really does define how the experience works for them.

I'm glad Jim's emotions came through in the drabbles, especially the first one, for you.

And if Jim and Blair shared their theory on why a peacock feather was found on a burned body, I think Simon would chomp his cigar in two, wave them off to take care of the problem and tell them he doesn't want to know about it.

Your idea for a follow-up story is interesting.
Thanks for reading and commenting,

Laurie

[t_verano]

Yay, they're posted!! I love Jim's possessiveness (and his rationalizations, heh) in the drabbles. And he did essentially duel for Blair and win, after a very close call that would have had Blair 'belonging' to Lash in the most permanent way; for him to be obsessing here so fits with that...

And I love the peacock story; Jimmy as a boy is still so Jim, and so brave and protective even while he has to deal with hiding his differences, and with his father's attitude. And the peacock description just really jumps out at me -- a wonderful idea, and vividly written. (And of course Blair would believe him! And find research to explain it! And at least, all these years later, Jim is validated.)

[laurie_ky]

Jim fought Lash to the death and emptied his gun into him. He was a bit stirred up, for sure. It seems natural for him to feel possesive about Blair.

I don't think people as adults are that removed personality wise from when they were kids. Sure, their life experiences shape them but the basic personality, I think, is still there. Mine is anyway. So I wanted to take Jim's qualities and show them in a younger version.

The peacock tattoo demon creeps me out every time I re-read this story. I scared myself with it.

And Blair validating Jim is just so important for them.

Thanks again for your insightful beta'ing, and re-reading and commenting,
Laurie

[mab_browne]

The demon story was creepy - but that's okay since it was meant to be. And I do like the twisty-turny of Jim's lizard brain and his more rational side in the drabbles - and how they both came to the same conclusion via different avenues. :-)

[laurie_ky]

Since I wanted this to be a creepy bit of horror, I'm glad that came across to you.

Jim's ego managed to find rational reasons to back up his id's demands. I'm happy it worked for you.

Thanks for reading and commenting,
Laurie