Yachiru fic: Sugar Crash

[laurie_bunter]

Opps. I just realized this fic has been hanging around my hard drive since August... along with a bunch of other stuff. I didn't realize that I was stockpiling fanfic. Good thing they can't be registered as deadly weapons.

I probably should start posting them slowly, huh? So here goes:

title: Sugar Crash
sensory prompt suggested by i_ve_landed:

Comments

OMG OMGOMGOMGOMGOMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[thesoundofsisu]

I'm too happy to check for typos, etc., yet! *bounces bounces bounces bounces bounces* Wheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!

This was HILARIOUS! I absolutely totally LOVED it! Soooooo worth the wait! I shall point out other schtuff later. Thanks, amazing fanfiction goddess of DOOM!

Re: OMG OMGOMGOMGOMGOMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[laurie_bunter]

I'm glad you really liked it :D I was worried it was too over-the-top *sigh of relief*

And I hoped you liked the wide range of unsuspecting victims too. It's nice to play with the residents of Soul Society, mwahahaha

[vesperh]

Ahahaha! Oh, thank you so much. That was hysterical. I love Yachiru's impeccable child-logic; I love Byakuya's waivers; I love shunpo-tag; I love her wearing Kenpachi's eyepatch; I LOVE the last line--that is killer. Excellent job, really.

Can I be your editor for a minute?
She really liked this candy. How can she have spent so many years ignorant of this candy’s existence?
"could" rather than "can"

Rukia-chan invited me, she said I in charge of entertainment
Insert "was"

The second one much longer: it was a waiver, saying that the Kuchiki clan could be held not responsible for any damage she may cause during the duration of its consumption.
Insert "was" in the first part. Might want to tweak the second part for clarity: “the Kuchiki clan could not be held responsible for any damage she might cause”

Now his third seats will be able to keep track
"would"

[laurie_bunter]

Oh, thank you for playing editor <3 That makes me really happy. I re-read this story so many times while editing it, my eyes just totally glossed over the mistakes.

I'm glad it made you laugh :D My work here is done.

P.S.
I hope you feel better, too. Get well soon!

[bunnisteffi]

... A junkie on Strawberry Hi-Chew? This is a first. XDD I didn't realise that I miss your ByaChiru(-ish) fics till this one. Thanks for the informative description of Hi-Chew! (It irks me that there're people who are reluctant to swallow the candy, thinking that it's gum, even if you insist however much that it's definitely 100% made of a stuff that gets one high.) Verperh's done a good job - I couldn't find any mistakes in the story. XD Just silent-giggling my way through.

Yachiru wasn’t particularly offended, except Ken-chan taught her not to stand down if she could score coolness points by staring.

“The candy is yours,” Byakuya finally blinked first, his eyes watering.

... Here, are you trying to make a point, twin? That Kuchiki-sama is indeed lacking in coolness points? >:

LOL. Thank you for writing these wonderful fics! Are there any more to be unearthed from your fic-nest for this fandom?

[laurie_bunter]

I like Hi-Chew... I only got to taste it by accident, I bought a roll at the Narita airport, thinking it was gum. I wish they had a local distributor here, sniff sniff.

Hahaha. Don't worry, Byakushi isn't totally lacking in coolness points. I mean, being one of the strongest captains is cool, right? But when compared to Yachiru, he's a horrible square. I bet he's the type of guy people go out of their way not to chat up during parties...

I looked over my list of sensory prompts, I still haven't written a word for Pride and Prejudice. XD Teehee. I do have ideas, though. I'll get around to it... someday...

[afteriwake]

OH I LOVED THIS SO MUCH!!! Seriously, this is the best Yachiru fic I've ever read. Wonderful job. ::goes to bookmark and rec::

[laurie_bunter]

Thanks XD That's serious praise, and it makes me happy. XD LALALALALALA

That's a really cute icon you have, too! Yachiru being interested in porn is just SO wrong! :D

[afteriwake]

I have fun randomly using that icon all around the Bleach fandom. It amuses me.

[shalomdebbie]

Thank you for the happiness. I needed that. <3

[laurie_bunter]

Aw. *hugs* You're welcome. I'm glad to have supplied a bit of sunshine.