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[laughs_muses]

Title: Azkaban

Author: laughs_muses (fic journal)

Pairing: Draco Malfoy, Harry Potter

Rating: PG-13

Disclaimer: No, No, No. Make me feel worse.

Summary: Malfoy is in Azkaban.

Set: Azkaban.

Beta: None.

Authors Notes: If you own the Donnie Darko Soundtrack I recommend listening "Ensurance Trap" on repeat while you read. I wanted to make this depressingly

Comments

[graphix_fret]

Depressingly blank it is. Wow.
I really liked this. The memories are like bright bits that just emphasize the emptiness between. The letting each other go was so much more renching then if they had had a relationship.

Harry doesn’t feel anything. He doesn’t feel cold. He doesn’t feel hot.

But he can hear.

He hears a memory so perfectly that it could be mistaken for the present.

“Potter.”

“Malfoy.”

This just about broke me.

[the_vixxmeister]

I definateley need some chocolate now! That is very well written and very depressing. *applause*

[charliemc]

I really enjoyed reading this. I think it's very well written and interesting.

But I almost didn't read it all. Because of these two lines:
Harry is thirty.

He feels very middle-aged.

I have to say that I think only someone who has no concept of being thirty could ever write that...

For the record, I'm in my mid-50's and never think of myself as middle-aged. And I don't know anyone in their 30's who thinks of themselves as middle-aged -- even the people I know who are chronically depressed...

It just doesn't ring true to me at all. Sorry.

I know what you were going for, but that portion of the fic doesn't work (at least for me). Which is unfortunate, because the rest of it is so damn good...

Anyway, I decided to be frank and say this -- because you might have other readers who aren't in their teens and twenties. (smile)

So, keep the future Harry/Draco goodness coming, of course. I hope this doesn't offend, because that's not my intent at all, by the way.

[charliemc]

Dont mean to cause an argument, but i know people in there 30's that feel more then middle aged. plus, with harry's life, i think he could feel like that at that age. Sucks you cant relate though, cos i really liked this story

[sesheta_66]

I totally understand what you're saying, because thirty doesn't feel "middle aged" ... however, I can relate to being 30+ and while most don't feel "middle aged" as you put it, I have been depressed, and it can make you feel far older than your years.

Also, Harry isn't a typical 30-year-old. Since Harry likely never really imagined living that long, coupled with the fact that he has been through war (he has likely seen so much death, including those his own age), I think it is reasonable that he could feel "middle aged".

So, while I've never felt middle-aged, I think it's feasible that Harry could at 30. Just my opinion ...

[laughs_muses]

No offence taken, I promise.

But fundamentally what I was trying to get across is that everything weighs down on Harry. I realy do understand that thirty isn't middle aged and that people, like yourself, never feel 'middle aged' as such. That's the type of life I hope to lead, but that's off the point.

I was just trying to show that Harry is being aged prematurely. And you're exactly right: "only someone who has no concept of being thirty could ever write that...". I have no idea what it's like to be thirty, so I guess I should probably get an older beta to look over my writing when I write the characters in an age bracket I haven't experienced.

Anyway, thanks for pointing it out. It sort of rings a bit hollow to me too, now that I re-read it.

Cheers for the comment; keep smiling,

Jessica

[caz_in_a_teacup]

Depressing blank, yes. Wow, though. No, I don't think I can be more coherent than that. Love how Malfoy still seems to be in control.

[megyal]

This is beautiful in the way a graveyard is beautiful; quiet and scarier in the night.

...thanks for sharing.