That was beautiful, truly. I'd like to leave some helpful concrit, but there isn't anything I could say that would make your writing better :) Your imagery was amazing, for one thing. But my favourite part of this piece was your description of how they grew together, and are simply one person, they're that close. The waycest wasn't overdone or anything, but it was important to the whole theme, so it works well, and it's sweet, the way you've written it :) Please write more, I'd love to read it!
Thank you so much =0) I'm really glad you liked it, and I really appreciate your ever so kind words! I was so uncomfortable with writing waycest, hence the lack of intricate backstory, but I'm glad you think it worked out well that way. I will definitely write more, though probably not this pairing! I'll always post to my journal though, so do feel free to check back from time to time. Thanks again!
I'm totally speechless at this; it was absolutely gorgeous and you should be proud of it =).
I loved your descriptions of New York city, particularly:
The air stays laced with drugssexcrimelife night after night, never losing potency, only gaining experience. In this city Night is just another resident. A veteran jazz pianist, weaving his music alone to an indifferent crowd, too lost in their drink and drama to give his art more than cursory praise
Such a vivid/lovely image- this whole piece was lovely. I really, really liked Mikey describing his dream to Gerard and the way you've shown their relationship. It's sweet, but in a subtle way, which I always like in fic.
In fact, I can't really find anything that I don't like about this. You've done an amazing job, and for someone who hasn't written in five years, I'm really in awe of this! Adding this to my memories and looking forward to reading more of your fic in future ^_^.
You're too kind! I'm really happy you liked the description of New York in particular - I've never even visited the city, part of me was terrified some resident New Yorker would call me out for having absolutely no familiarity with it's atmosphere! I'll definitely be writing more fics, tough probably not this pairing, and maybe not MCR, but if you're interested, do check my journal from time to time! Thanks again!
Ooh, I only just noticed this comment! Thanks so much for saying that, you've made me feel rather good about two of the main things I was worried about: NY and smut! I didn't think I could write either, but I gave one of them a try, and I'm glad it came off. Doesn't mean I'll be trying my hand at the other any time soon though. Thanks again for reading!
I really like the personification of 'Night' and the things he does. This fic was so full of words and thoughts and imagery and that makes it absolutely gorgeous. I especially liked the backing on their relationship - There was never one beginning to this. We grew together, not apart, and so there was never a magical ‘coming together’. No hidden secrets, longing looks or awkward silences. He has always just been there. And one day, I realized, so was I. - because every Waycest I've read always has those darned 'hidden glances'. Those are cliched, and I loved how your paragraph was different. It was just perfectly described.
And the ending was stunning. I don't know why I love it, but I just do, and it's one of those times I read something and wish I had thought of it first xD. I'm really going to look forward to seeing more fics from you.
Thanks for being so nice =0) Avoiding the cliches was one thing I was really scared I hadn't managed, so I'm relieved you feel it did. Know what? Not to appear conceited, but I loved that ending too! I have NO idea where it came from, nor the whole dream either, it was one of those things that literally wrote itself! I'm so happy with how this piece has been received, I'll definitely be posting more, if not in communites then definitely on this journal. Thanks again =0)
this was really beautiful. and im sorry this is a completely lame-ass comment, with no concrit & advice or whatever, but, well i duno. Theres just something about how you write which draws you in. its just... gah. i cant think of a decent word for it. so im just gonna say its amazing. and im glad you didnt go overboard with the waycest. because if something like incest was truly happening... the problem isnt exactly gonna be solved by fucking eachother senceless is it?... which usually happens in waycest fics. you just make it seem so much more realistic. well done :)
I'm glad you liked it, I'm not a huge fan of the brother love either! I couldn't write anything worse than PG if I tried for this pairing; beauty and angst was what I was aiming for. Feel free to friend me, as well. I don't post much of any use to anyone very often, but nice to know you're interested =0) Thanks again!
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Your imagery was amazing, for one thing. But my favourite part of this piece was your description of how they grew together, and are simply one person, they're that close. The waycest wasn't overdone or anything, but it was important to the whole theme, so it works well, and it's sweet, the way you've written it :)
Please write more, I'd love to read it!
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I'm really glad you liked it, and I really appreciate your ever so kind words! I was so uncomfortable with writing waycest, hence the lack of intricate backstory, but I'm glad you think it worked out well that way.
I will definitely write more, though probably not this pairing! I'll always post to my journal though, so do feel free to check back from time to time.
Thanks again!
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I loved your descriptions of New York city, particularly:
The air stays laced with drugssexcrimelife night after night, never losing potency, only gaining experience. In this city Night is just another resident. A veteran jazz pianist, weaving his music alone to an indifferent crowd, too lost in their drink and drama to give his art more than cursory praise
Such a vivid/lovely image- this whole piece was lovely. I really, really liked Mikey describing his dream to Gerard and the way you've shown their relationship. It's sweet, but in a subtle way, which I always like in fic.
In fact, I can't really find anything that I don't like about this. You've done an amazing job, and for someone who hasn't written in five years, I'm really in awe of this! Adding this to my memories and looking forward to reading more of your fic in future ^_^.
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I'm really happy you liked the description of New York in particular - I've never even visited the city, part of me was terrified some resident New Yorker would call me out for having absolutely no familiarity with it's atmosphere!
I'll definitely be writing more fics, tough probably not this pairing, and maybe not MCR, but if you're interested, do check my journal from time to time!
Thanks again!
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Thanks so much for saying that, you've made me feel rather good about two of the main things I was worried about: NY and smut! I didn't think I could write either, but I gave one of them a try, and I'm glad it came off.
Doesn't mean I'll be trying my hand at the other any time soon though.
Thanks again for reading!
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And the ending was stunning. I don't know why I love it, but I just do, and it's one of those times I read something and wish I had thought of it first xD. I'm really going to look forward to seeing more fics from you.
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Avoiding the cliches was one thing I was really scared I hadn't managed, so I'm relieved you feel it did.
Know what? Not to appear conceited, but I loved that ending too! I have NO idea where it came from, nor the whole dream either, it was one of those things that literally wrote itself!
I'm so happy with how this piece has been received, I'll definitely be posting more, if not in communites then definitely on this journal.
Thanks again =0)
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Just knowing you liked it is good enough for me, as I was really nervous that no one would like it at all, so your comment helped a lot!
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Feel free to friend me, as well. I don't post much of any use to anyone very often, but nice to know you're interested =0)
Thanks again!
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