FIC: Respite (Part 1 of 3); Fandom: White Collar

[laesmeralda]

Title: Respite (1 of 3)
Author: Esmeralda (laesmeralda)
Fandom: White Collar
Dramatis Personae: Neal Caffrey/Peter Burke
Warnings: Follow up to the three-parter Tribulation: Part 1
Rating: R to NC-17
Disclaimer: This is a work of impure fiction.
Feedback: Responses, including constructive criticism, are welcome.
Original Date: Written April 2012
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Comments

[laesmeralda]

Thanks, love, for the detail--helps to know what doesn't work and what does. :)

Would you be willing, either here or offline, to give me some specifics on the voices that didn't sound right? I usually pride myself on that point and want to fix it. The other two chapters are mostly written, and if I can rewrite this part well first, I think I'll "hear" better for the other editing. I know you're busy but... Otherwise, I'd have to rewatch a bunch of episodes to retune my ear and my husband will not cooperate. ;)

[laesmeralda]

Edits posted, parts 2 and 3 soon to follow... thanks again for your help. The best I can hope is that I didn't spoil what was fun, but it reads better to me and this time, I kept more of Neal's secrets.

[elrhiarhodan]

Hot and lovely, and thinky too. Just the right amount of angst and sex.

[laesmeralda]

Thank you! My dear friend libitina helped me smooth out some rough edges. Heaven knows I can't write unthinky, so I'm glad you enjoyed that aspect.

[elrhiarhodan]

Yes, I love thinky. Can't wait for the next parts.