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ladydeathfaerie

Sins of the Past

Mar 07, 2011 20:02

Title: Sins of the Past
Chapter Six: Damage
Fandom: the Marvel Universe, specifically the Mutant Sue extension
Rating: no one under 18. there will be violence and dirty language and whatever else i feel like tossing in here.
Warning: as i said, violence. probably lots of it. character death. foul language. bloodshed. possibly more stuff along ( Read more... )

character: logan/wolverine, character: steve rogers/captain america, character: tony stark/iron man, character: omc, character: charles xavier/professor x, character: alasdare "dare" scott, character: faye lefavre, subject: fan fiction, character: rosemary "roxxy" stewart/cats, character: remy lebeau/gambit, character: johnny storm/human torch, character: haley stone/icon, character: ofc, universe: marvel, idea: mary sue virus, character: clint barton/hawkeye/ronin, character: morgan lefavre

Comments 5

ginevrasm March 8 2011, 02:43:24 UTC

Woot! Great climax! Lots of action and pyrotechnics.

I'm loving this piece. I'll be eagerly awaiting the conclusion.

ladydeathfaerie March 8 2011, 02:51:35 UTC

i probably could have gone on and on with the action and the pyrotechnics. the girl wanted to burn some shit. she's not happy that i wouldn't let her.

glad you've been enjoying. i'm hoping to be done soon. working on the conclusion as we type.

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ladydeathfaerie March 8 2011, 02:54:29 UTC

you've been wowing this whole thing. do you know no other adjective?

once it started evolving, that scene with Jess was just there. i think, at first, i thought to use Dee. but Dee's nine or so at the writing of this. Jess is only about three or four. so she fit better.

i'm glad you've been enjoying. i don't know if Dare ever was normal to begin with, so it isn't like they have far to go there. i'm sure it'll happen, though. eventually. maybe.

dazzledfirestar March 8 2011, 03:01:49 UTC

I'm trying my best to form coherent thoughts past "HOLY SHIT!" and "WOW!" but I'm not having much luck. lol

This is amazing work, hun. Everyone's voice is perfect. I love love LOVE Haley getting pissy with Steve! :D That's my girl! :D She's finally come into her own and she doesn't even get to enjoy it. LOL

This fight is epic though, hun. Absolutely wonderful and scary and intense. Perfect across the board, actually. :) The way you weaved in the memories of everything else is really really effective too!

Can't wait to see what's next!

ladydeathfaerie March 8 2011, 03:36:07 UTC

i'm really glad you liked it. and i'm really glad that i've got everyone's voice just right. i have to say that i love Haley being snotty with Captain Fucking America myself. (almost called him that here, too. *grin*)

i wanted the memories to play into everything she's done since she came back, so they were as important here as they were in the other chapters. like i said, Dare wanted to burn everything. she kind of likes that new found power. ~.^

so glad you enjoyed. i don't know if it was all epic and stuff. but i'm glad you enjoyed. and hopefully i'll have it done by tonight.