THE INDIAN CHIEF GOES BOW HUNTING 2/2

[lady_m_319]

Title: The Indian Chief Goes Bow Hunting

Author: Lady M

Characters: John, Dean (10), Sam (6), Pastor Jim

Rating: PG-13 for spanking and mild swearing.

Warning: Parental spanking of minors. Please don't read if it offends you.

Disclaimer: Eric Kripke and the CW own all. I own nothing.

Comments

[lady_m_319]

The two boys are definitely strong willed and keep John on his toes. But he knows his boys well. Sammy's kid logical was a real challenge for John but his 6 yr old antics were humorous. And Pastor Jim kept things on a lighter side with his insights into the Winchester family dynamics. I'm glad you thought the fic was fun :) and it made you laugh. I couldn't ask for more. Thanks for commenting.

[capricorn86]

Awesome story. Little Sammy is so adorable.
A bird pooped on his head! That made me laugh SO hard. Poor Sammy, but that was just too funny!
I really like Pastor Jim, he`s so calm and easy-going, he adds a touch of light-hearted humor to the Winchester family dynamic.
I really liked the line about how it was a hard lesson for Sam to learn, and a hard one for John to teach. Sam got a pretty hard spanking I think, but he did need to be discouraged from playing with real weapons. John is just trying his best to keep his children safe.
Lovely, fun family moment at the end. Looking forward to seeing more from you! :D

[lady_m_319]

Glad you like the fic. I almost took out the bird poo part. Now I'm glad I left it in. The show didn't give us a lot about Pastor Jim's personality so he's a blank page to write. I thought even though he's a hunter that as a pastor he'd have a softer side. Glad how I wrote him worked.

John handed out serious spanking to his boys so we felt sorry for the boys. I didn't want John to come across as a monster. I like a stern but loving John. I wanted to give insight into John's motivation without being too out of character. As you said, he's just trying to keep his children safe, the best way he knows how. Glad that came across.

I'm a smoosh. I like to end on a happy note!

Thanks for your comment and encouragement to write more.

[mrslinus]

HAHAHA! OMG I laughed so hard sometimes: "“Crap! I’m not beating anyone with the stick,” John sharply answers in frustration.

Pastor Jim snickers. "

and here: " It looks like there’s two Japanese flags floating in my bathtub water.”"

Little mad unhappy Sammy is really cute. naughty, but cute! ANd now we know why he was tied up to a tree :D Smart Dean! :D

Thank you for writing. I enjoyed it very much :))

[lady_m_319]

I was hoping there were some humorous parts. That stick just kept on haunting John, and Pastor Jim kept pointing it out. Poor pruney Dean sporting a pair of red buttocks. And nice of Jim to mention that. Glad you liked his flag line.(I did too.)

I agree, Sammy had his naughty moments. But with the pouty face and the floppy hair he must have been adorable, even mad.

We didn't really have the whole story of what happened until Sammy confessed at the end. Dean should never have 'forgotten' and left his brother tied to a tree but he had a 'kid reason' for doing it. And Sammy was just being a naughty strong willed kid. Too bad John saw it differently for both of them.

Thanks for reading and commenting. Knowing the humor came across is like a warm hug. *grin*

[winchesterlove2]

*giggle* cute!

[lady_m_319]

Thanks! That says a lot!

[spankedbyspike]

As usual your stories are made of awesome.

I liked the storyline very much and even more the fact each character got it's time in the spotlight to get to see things from their perspective.

All characters are loveable and the story progress quite nicely.

Thanks for sharing!

[lady_m_319]

Aww, thank you for the compliment of awesome. I'm glad you liked the story. The boys are great together but they're also strong characters apart which makes it easy to write them. And Papa Winchester pulls it all together. It was fun to write the boys' different personalities and mishaps but ultimately they just wanted to spend time with their father. Which each got their own special quality time over his knee.

My fics tend to be on the long side so it's good to know it progressed well. I spend a lot of time editing and I cut out a lot of extra's that I don't think really add to the core of the story. Thanks for letting me know it's time well spent.

Thanks for your encouraging and insightful comment.

[spankedbyspike]

You know? That's the pleasure I get from being in a community. In one I feel confident enough to comment (truly) and encourage my fellow members.

Without each one of our contributions, things will be dead around and we would all miss out.

I like a good story, well conceived and well developped that doesn't leave room for questions. You did a fantastic job and I am more than happy to acknowledge you and encourage you to come up with more.

With stories like yours, I get to fall in love even more with the characters and that is quite a feast, THANK YOU!