Psychobabble (Deatils) Part 3

[lady_dae]

Title: Psychobabble (Details)
Fandom: RPF
Pairing: Pinto
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: Don't own 'em, just love 'em
Warnings: long-term angst, OFC, mild het
Summary: Part 3 of 11. Zach has a crush on Chris but Chris really doesn't want to know. A lot of angst, UST and crappy decision making follows and eventually, Zach has to make a choice

Comments

[aliassmith]

This just keeps pulling me deeper and deeper. My heart breaks for Zach, of course-- the image of him on his knees before Chris, declaring his love and just being so broken-- but to be honest, this chapter really had me feeling for Chris. Zach is just destroying everything Chris thought he knew; acting like the bull in Chris' proverbial china shop, no matter how unintentionally. The way you're portraying Chris' confusion and irritation is truly moving. And then of course, you give us this:
He hadn’t wiped his kiss away.
And my Pinto heart gets all wibbly.
I can't wait to see what happens next!

[lady_dae]

Yeah I thought Chris needed his side put and I will do a few more Chris povs throughout, just to even up the feel of the story.
I know what you mean about the china shop too. As I wrote I thought, 'wow, Zach is so heart-wrenching in this' and then I finished it and looked back on it and it was actually all about how Chris was dealing with Zach's feelings for him.
I'm glad you like the last line, I kinda had a Chris moment when writing it, when I realised paragraphs afterwards, that Chris hadn't wiped the kiss away when he stepped back from Zach. I do love it when my characters do what I want them to do before I even know what it is myself :)

[lady_dae]

....wow! I never made anyone cry before (well, not by using fanfic :P) I'm actually happy that I made you cry, which makes me think I might need therapy of some kind... Either way, I'm glad the chapter worked like it was supposed to :)

[tinocka]

This is so heartbreaking. I feel so sorry for both of them. I CAN´T WAIT FOR MORE! I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT! PLEASE, SOON? *puppy eyes*

[lady_dae]

... must... resist... puppy... eyes!...
Oh it's no use, I wanna know what happens as much as you do! The boys keep trying to do stuff that's NOT IN THE SCRIPT! Still, at least that means that I can still be surprised by them... me... all three of us...

YES!!!

[storyshark2005]

oh, you made my night with this update. this is SUCH an original take. heck, i'm not even really sure they're going to get together in the end. that's the FIRST time i've had that happen with a pinto fic. i mean, whether they realize it or not, they're ALWAYS in love, or about to fall into it. the last line was the only hint i got. but right now chris is in a very difficult place. what do you do when your best friend is in love with you...and you're not interested? you can't make yourself to make them feel better. GOD this is good. really intriguing.

Re: YES!!!

[lady_dae]

Wow. :D Would it be weird if said I wanted to put you in a roll and eat you because you are so awesome? It would be, wouldn't it...
Oh well I shall just have to settle for telling you are awesome and speshl. There will be some Pinto action eventually (because hey, its Pinto and there must be a Royal/Presidential Mandate somewhere that ORDERS them to get squishy at least once per fic) but I was trying to steer clear of the whole 'no, I don't want to be with you, oh wait I actually loved you all the time, let's get married' thing. Chris does love Zach very much but he's never had to deal with a platonic male friend wanting him in the way that Zach wants him (at least in my 'Verse), so he feels really off base and at a loss as to how he should feel, how he should deal with it.

[kianspo]

Yeah, baby. Angst turned up all the way. Zach's gonna so hate himself in the morning. D: But maybe he needed that. Jeez. So wrecking. Great job.

[lady_dae]

Lol, he definitely needed to get that little factoid of 'I love you, Chris' off his chest but I think they're both gonna feel pretty crappy in the morning :P *sigh* why do I hurt them so much?