Fighting Sleep

[lacyrelic]

Fighting Sleep

Sitting uncomfortably in his chair, Ichigo defiantly fights the pull of the bed before him. . He tries to to keep his eyes open. It feels light and his body slowly being melted into the bed. He feels the weight of his legs getting heavy and the darkness (and not the usual annoying one) coyly whispering to him to close his eyes,

Comments

[blood_gem]

WHEEE! ANGST!!!! Oh, angst, how I lurve thee! ^O^

Eh...okay, insanity aside, I think you did really well describing Ichigo's emotions and keeping them the focus/center of the piece. It could've used a little more description of the setting/bed/Hitsugaya.

[lacyrelic]

hmm. i was actually basing that last part on myself (when i'm really sleeping everything blurs together). *hides in closet to figure out how to fix)

[hyourintenshi]

Poor Ichigo... or should I say poor Hitsu-chan? Eh, oh well. I really liked how you didn't mention Hitsu-chan until near the end. It adds a sense of mystery, when Ichigo absolutely refused to sleep on the bed. And Hitsu-chan inviting Ichigo on the bed = CUTE.

Me likey very much <3

[lacyrelic]

yeah, poor lil bishies (cuddles hitsu plushie).

[moon_wing]

The imagery was wonderful, how exhausted Ichigo was and saying Hitsugaya was sick without really saying it. Beautiful.