Exchange Fic #24: En Fuego (2/3)

[dmacabre]

The actual identity of the writer will remain secret until all the submissions are in and posted.

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Title: En Fuego, Part Two
Author: dmacabre
Recipient: rikkitsune
Prompt: Jareth abdicates the Goblin Throne and chooses a normal mortal life with Sarah, Aboveground. Unfortunately, the bored and lonely Labyrinth has other plans for the power couple...
Rating: PG-

Comments

[startraveller]

First this:

"My apologies, I didn't mean to assume you could read."

And this:

It's a tale as old as time: boy meets girl, boy abducts girl's little brother in a misguided bid for attention, boy subjects girl to grueling social experiment called "the Labyrinth", girl defeats boy in humiliating rout resulting in the destruction of half the city, boy loses girl.

BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!

I was positively riveted.

But then... There is more right?? *puppy dog eyes*

[dmacabre]

I thought that was a good way to sum up the events of the movie, in case anyone forgot. *g*

[lixxle]

And the awesomeness continues! And this whole section?

"It's a tale as old as time: boy meets girl, boy abducts girl's little brother in a misguided bid for attention, boy subjects girl to grueling social experiment called "the Labyrinth", girl defeats boy in humiliating rout resulting in the destruction of half the city, boy loses girl."

BRILLIANT

I am bewitched by this story! The writing is brilliant; the characterisations are magnificent; the hot, mortal, slightly-singed Jareth is delectable...the list goes on.

Off to read the next part...hang on, where is it? NOOOOO!! Where is the next bit?! Moderator--your pauses between uploads can be so cruel! Please, please give me the precious.... *whimpers*

[dmacabre]

I picture mortal Jareth dressed like Thin White Duke Bowie. And then I sort of forget to write, because I'm busy picturing. *fans self*

[themsmine]

I'm very curious about the cat! Is the cat the demon? I guess I'll find out in the final installment. Looking forward to it. :)

[dmacabre]

Ahahaha, I sort of wanted to imply that, yes. Not sure if that came across very well, it was a tricky bit of the story and I rewrote it so many times I can't keep it straight in my own head anymore!

[auorakem]

"Disgustingly good looking" - seriously you have Harry's inner thoughts and monologue down to pat. And Jareth is just the way I like my Goblin King: all snark and sass. I, too, kept picturing him as the Thin White Duke with slightly more disheleved hair, and then I kept getting sidetracked while reading, which is why it took me longer to get through this part.

Also I think I might have had a heart attack from all the fluff at the idea of Sarah and Jareth living together, running a bookstore, and Jareth using his magic to make them dinner. *Flails* too cute.

[dmacabre]

I always picture Aboveground Goblin King looking/dressing like the Thin White Duke, too. *cough* Very distracting, indeed.

This is fantastic!

[willdew]

I loved this:

Stuck in the window was a handwritten sign that said: We do not serve Starbucks, so don't ask.

I can't imagine anywhere better than a mortal(?!)Jareth and Sarah to live than a bookstore with crabby hand-written messages strewn about the place and operating hours that operate on a whim.

Also your writing style is gorgeous. Maybe I've just been reading fanfiction for too long, but every once in a while I find someone whose prose is so gorgeous and free from spelling and grammatical error, and has enough style to be both aesthetically and rhythmically pleasing... and I almost want to weep. That's what your writing is like.

Have you archived this elsewhere? LiveJournal is so dead these days and this story is great. You should stick it up on A03 or fanfiction.net if you haven't already. ^_^

Re: This is fantastic!

[dmacabre]

Thank you! I'm sure it's not entirely free of grammar/spelling errors, but I try to aim for readability, anyway. :-}

I haven't archived any of the Labyrinth/Dresden Files fics anywhere except on LJ, since they were written for challenges and exchanges, mostly. But I've been meaning to and I really should. LJ isn't the most convenient place to archive anything, and it's always good to have a back up somewhere just in case.