Tables turned over

[kyle_craig]

 One thousand snails get on their backs and ride on railways

Comments

[i_love_gravity]

This would make a good song.

i loved this: because I admire an animal put in it's place.
but i didn't like (unless it is a song) the following verse.

By the way, this is Amanda. Feel free to add me, or my writing one (oh_the_blow)

[kyle_craig]

Thank you! What makes you feel it would be better as a song? That's really interesting to me. Also, which following verse are you referring to? The lines coming right after it? I wrote this before but my computer fucked up so I sent it again.

[i_love_gravity]

The way the words flow sound like they would be better to music then read, (or spoken aloud).

This is a song:
because I admire an animal put in it's place
not always so god damned focused on winning the fucking race
because I've lost every time
and I feel fine

all that right there, it would be perfect.
i used to write songs for friends, and such.
i have no musical talent, though

[kyle_craig]

The whole thing is a song I just finished for my band.
so you were pretty spot on. That's why it was so interesting that you said that. Good insight.