Fic: Life- an experiment

[kwritten]

Title- Life: an experiment
Summary- Dawn's on-campus life needs a boost
Characters- Dawn, Spike
Rating- PG
Note- NEVER written any fic before so it's really rough. Still don't have Spike's voice down yet - but I needed to get this out. Post-NFA, an alt 'verse in which the Slayers came to help Angel in the LA battle.

Dawn woke up with a start and

Comments

your hand at fics

[happyg_rl]

Not bad for a first-timer xD Though I'm not entirely surprised. Not only are you a fantastic writer, you also have your own idea about the characters of the buffy-verse world. Spike *is* a hard character to right. You don't want him to come off super british, which some writers do. (that's obnoxious) I like their quirky stuff. It's cute! Is this a one-shot or will there be more to come??

Re: your hand at fics

[kwritten]

Hoping more to come. There's something about Dawn's development that didn't have a place here - and I like the family dynamic between Dawn, Spike, and Cordy - would like to see more of that from Dawn's perspective. Actually, I'd like to just see more of/work more with Dawn. Especially in an alt-'verse where things are relatively "normal" so she can work through all the previous bad.

from <lj user="feedbackathon">:

[snowpuppies]

I really like what you've done here. The AU situation is nicely thought out, and I like the idea of Dennis still being around. I've always been a big fan of Cordy-Dawn interaction (I've actually written a fic about Cordy babysitting Dawn in early seasons), so it's nice to see that addressed, here

Re: from <lj user="feedbackathon">:

[kwritten]

Thanks so much for your feedback! I was super nervous about entering, because I'm so new at writing fiction in any form. And this specific piece was my very first of all the things.

Everything that you say makes sense. The only thing I can really think to respond to, is "placed in Cordy's old apt" - I was trying to go for a sense of Dawn's life not really be in control. This whole AU is focused on Dawnie wanting to write her own life, in her own way. So "was placed" I was hoping would add to a sense of Dawn feeling like not-quite-human, or - a pawn that has to deal with other people's decisions.

I'll think more on how to do that in a better way. Thanks again!

[kwritten]

Thanks so much for your feedback! You are so sweet!

And I know, my prose and dialogue is still in need of some fine-tuning. Until the feedbackathon, these posts were all set to a private-lock because I knew they needed help.

The AU is huge, dude. Epically huge. There is a lot of showing to be done, but since this was the very beginning, I felt like telling was okay for the very start.

[eternal_moonie]

Absolutely LOVE it!!

[kwritten]

Ack! I am so very glad! This was the VERY FIRST fic I ever, ever wrote.

Something about Spike slipping a condom into her back pocket tickles me to no end :)

Thanks for reading and commenting!!!

[lokifan]

Aw, this is really lovely <3

[kwritten]

thanks so much!!! ♥