Comments | kseda: Twister City stuff: the famous ~elevator bit~

kseda

Twister City stuff: the famous ~elevator bit~

Apr 03, 2009 23:23

Screw it, you guys are getting the elevator bit because it WON'T LEAVE ME ALONE THIS TIME. Here's the deal: it's late in season 1, Zero's turned up, Cain and LeFevre are running some random errand at the Juvenile Justice Authority up in the Jayhawk Tower in the middle of a thunderstorm, and then this slashery happens. BTW, you'll need this. I ( Read more... )

twister city, fic: tin man

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erinm_4600 April 4 2009, 03:38:56 UTC

Really, Cain... o.O

*gives Ambrose a quick smooch*

kseda April 4 2009, 04:10:53 UTC

Wyatt Cain: manfully repressing things since 2007.

♥

erinm_4600 April 4 2009, 11:50:49 UTC

...even when he's a schmuck

kseda April 4 2009, 12:43:57 UTC

It's part of his charm!

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rissy_james April 4 2009, 04:18:45 UTC

Your awesomeness is inspiring. I liked the part with the sitting and the paper and the rejected escape attempts.

kseda April 4 2009, 12:47:50 UTC

*smishes* Thank you! And yeah, never ever leave blank pieces of paper where Ambrose can find them for they will soon be covered with incomprehensible nonsense.

oddsbobs April 4 2009, 06:44:05 UTC

It would be a very long time before he forgave himself.

OUCH. ♥

Does all of this get in the 'show' or is some of it cut, to make the Big Reveal more shocking?

kseda April 4 2009, 12:45:50 UTC

Oh this is all sliced to hell for "broadcast," of course. Hee!

And yeah, pretty much. GET THEE TO A SHRINK, DETECTIVE!

lionille April 4 2009, 14:51:09 UTC

*flail* Much, much, MUCH love for this. Where to even begin? The counted time procession of the segments. How they start off all businesslike and end up on the floor sharing their life stories with each other.

Ambrose is a hundred kinds of wonderful - with his shutting off of the alarm, and his sketches, and escape plans, and his "you've gotta hear this in stereo." The whole thing with the earbuds is strangely intimate! Nice prelude to The Big Moment.

Oh, and Cain freaking out and needing to take off his tie. Or rather, needing to be told by Ambrose to take off his tie... LOL!

It happened, Cain! It really really happened!

brewsternorth April 4 2009, 21:58:23 UTC

Yes! This is just pitch-perfect. Reminds me of the buddiness between Gibbs and Ducky in NCIS. Except with even more awesome and awkwardness. And a really good soundtrack, hee.

/eta: slight typo here, I think: One house, fifty eight minutes "house" should be "hour".

kseda April 7 2009, 18:25:39 UTC

...every single time I look at everything I write I edit something. This is what I get for hating betas.

Thanks, of course! *smishes the buddiness* Partnery first, coupley second, that's how I like it.

kseda April 7 2009, 18:23:54 UTC

FOREVER LATER I find myself able to leave feedback to your feedback. You always leave me speechless.

The business/familiar transition there...it was some of the more blatent surname vs. first-name abuse I've ever done, and then I just tried hammering the point home with the switch in the last section. I wrote this instead of meta about their relationship; this is pretty much the arc.

Complete with Ambrose drawing a diagram *snickers* I love these two so much, they've eaten whatever was left of my brain.

And Cain, CAIN. He'll figure it out, I have faith!

gatechic April 4 2009, 15:06:10 UTC

YAY for the elevator scene!

Every bit of this was awesome. :D

kseda April 7 2009, 18:27:42 UTC

It's only been in my head since last summer, it's not THE first scene I plotted but it's in the top 5 *snickers* Oh, me.

Thank you, hon, so glad you liked it!