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It's you...again!
Nov 02, 2010 17:09
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Tea leaves?
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silly
,
second pov
,
prompt
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writing2death
November 6 2010, 04:05:42 UTC
I like it! But I think you got you're POV mixed up. You have this written in first person.
Second person go more like this:
"You take some dried leaves and dried logs from the beach and put them down in your circle gently, not trying to ruin your awesomeness."
Get it?
But besides that, I really like it! Thanks for filling the prompt :D
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Second person go more like this:
"You take some dried leaves and dried logs from the beach and put them down in your circle gently, not trying to ruin your awesomeness."
Get it?
But besides that, I really like it! Thanks for filling the prompt :D
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