FIC: EMERGENCE

[morganlight]

Title: Emergence

Comments

[cdvla313]

You know I love it bb! I love the mood and atmosphere of the piece. <3

[morganlight]

You are the best beta ever. <3

[silver_keys]

I like the swagger in your use of language and metaphor--that poetic directness that bypasses convention and goes straight for the viscera--and in the cadence of the short paragraphs. This would sound awesome read out loud.

Keep on doing your brave weird fabulous thing bb.

[morganlight]

I like the swagger in your use of language and metaphor--that poetic directness that bypasses convention and goes straight for the viscera--and in the cadence of the short paragraphs.

That is quite possibly the UNFiest compliment I've ever gotten. Swagger! Viscera! Cadence! such sexy words. You are amazing. <3

And actually, when I write something, rhythm is very important to me. I usually read things aloud before finalizing them.

Thank you, thank you, thank you for getting it. I am grinning.

[forever_lost2u]

This is gorgeous, bb. I love how it feels almost distant. I'm not usually a fan of second-person POV, but in this case it worked out perfectly.

<3 loved it!

[morganlight]

THANK YOU! I actually love second person, and I try to make it work as often as possible. ;)

[ambroya]

This has such a surreal, ethereal, out of body quality to it. It's spiritual in a way, like you made us feel some sort of universal pull.

I liked it.

A lot.

[morganlight]

<3 <3 Surreality is what I strive for. Thank you, bb.

[morganlight]

lol 'slimy and gorgeous' - a perfect description of tongue kissing! ;) Seriously, kissing is weird, and I wanted to capture that - how it's sexy and gross at the same time. [Though I actually edited out some of the earlier images cause they made cdvla313 say 'gross'. lol]

Thank you so much for understanding this and not running away in the opposite direction because it's not 'fantasy-fulfillment' fic. I mean, I like fantasy as much as the next person, but I think it's just as important to be rocked out of our comfort zone once in a while.