Heartless: A Kradam Poem (PG) (3/?)

[icebar]

here's the third poem in the set i'm writing about kradam. it might be the last, but idk yet.
please read the other two if you haven't, or if you want to!
1. Endless (PG-13)
2. Helpless (PG)
comments are loved. also, tell me if i should change anything or if you didn't like something, etc.
i made the ending happier this time!
rating: PG, nothing bad.
i

Comments

[absinthe_memory]

Okay I really like this a lot. Lots of strong imagery. Really, really loved it.

[icebar]

thank you! :D

[listlesscabaret]

Well, you didn't disappoint, yet again! :) I love the imagery, especially at the beginning with the allusions to Genesis and the snake and all that jazz. I thought that was a lovely twist one something that's been used before.

<3

[icebar]

thanks! i am not really familiar with the bible at all, so i hope i referred to it correctly..

[listlesscabaret]

Yeah, you did. I'm no expert on the Bible by any means, but enough so to know that you handled it beautifully.

[maquiladora7]

I love your poems. :) The biblical allusions in this one were interesting, and very well done.

[icebar]

thanks for saying so!

[screamit0ut]

Yay! Another one! Haha, I really like this, you just really seem to have a way with words.... <3

[icebar]

thanks!!