Round 1: The Remainder Theorem (Team Future)

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Title: The Remainder Theorem
Team: Future
Rating: PG-13
Fandom: SME
Pairing: Luna/Minho
Summary: It’s not about falling in love with someone. It’s about falling in love with the idea of that person, with the idea of being in love.
Author's Note: I wanted to play with perspectives a bit. And write an epic love story at the same time. Hopefully, I

Comments

[starlitbright]

I liked this! I'm not a huge fan of Minho/Luna but I do like het, and I think you handled it really well!

Future is definitely the hardest theme to write for since it's quite constricting, but I did like that you didn't just take 'future' as in events that will happen in x years time, but also that feelings change, people change. Despite that, the characterisation was still spot on! I have to say that it was kind of confusing during that text messaging conversation, though, since I had to google what '엠버' was in English, but I like the sparseness of your writing and especially Luna -- no longer sweet and predictable, but still definitely Luna :) ♥

[compatable]

hi. i adore minho/luna and have been deprived of it and this was seriously awesome.

i guess if i had to pick out what i mostly liked from reading this fic, it would have to be how every event was ordered and timed. i guess you would call that pacing? but yeah, definitely not one of those fics where you feel like events are being skipped, because every part of this is significant to the story.

despite minho/luna being the main pairing, i liked how you wrote minho's interactions with the other f(x) members! it was interesting to read krystal as a drunkard who still seems so young with her moment with minho: Halfway through her bowl of cereal, Soojung abruptly looks up from the comics sobs. and it's kind of funny and cute how minho is demoted to a boy around victoria. He wonders if they know how to witness the graceful, quiet ending of a boy's first love. your lines are amazing. i felt like the amber conversation was what really cinched up the story, especially when she tells him about the common mistake and accidentally gives him a

[compatable]

wait, i forgot to mention one last thing. although i really liked this fic, there were some conversations where i was confused about who was speaking. especially where it would be 3 people-conversation and i would have to go back and reread. but it's not exactly a problem, bc it might have just been my brain not working at the time.

[nautisch]

I left a comment in my vote but the word count was restrictive, so I decided to comment here.

first off, the writing is great. seriously. it's spectacular and the pacing is great. it works really well with that prompt about moments meaning everything to one person but nothing to the next--every little thing means the world to minho. and speaking of him, I think his characterization is pitch-perfect, I haven't read many fics where he's written this well. he's the one that's comfortable with where he is in life, and doesn't really need that many changes to be happy.

the one thing that threw me off was the way you wrote luna and krystal. there's grains of the current luna that I could definitely pick out (her adventurousness and desire to travel in particular), but oftentimes I felt like you were molding luna to fit your idea/inspiration instead of molding them to fit her. sometimes she and krystal did or said things that I just couldn't see them doing at all. of course, this is future fic, and there's no telling who they'll become

[woocheeks]

I was glued to this *___*

I really like how it's not just Minho and Luna, there's Amber and Jonghyun and Victoria and everyone else who has had an impact on their past and present. Even Taemin, who's in Japan.

Ugh, just that Minho is too late to make things right, that their story doesn't have a happy ending (or does it?).

Bravo!

[spacejunks]

They both cut into each other at the same time without knowing, and subsequently hurt themselves in the process. Ouch ;; I had to pace myself to keep up with you, but I think I understood it, or at least enough to be in awe of how you incorporated the prompt and theme. A lot of what Minho (and Luna) go through seems and feels... harrowing, almost unbearably so. Ah, growing up. My favorite scene is the one of Victoria and Minho in the cafe. I really like this.