Sing something new, I have nothing left.

[korynth]

Distracting husband turned into annoying husband, then back into distracting husband. Then we had a storm hit with marble-sized hail. Ugh, what a night.

In other news: THIS IS SO BAD, I DON'T EVEN...

Rating: PG-13
Pairing: Cloud x Kuja
Notes: IT IS FINISHED. But toffeethesnob, feel free to tell me if I should change anything. I feel like I messed up epically

Comments

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[korynth]

[korynth]

Alright, I've added ~500 words to the end and fixed up a few lines throughout. Let me know what you think now! Feel free to be brutally honest, I don't mind redoing it a few times to get it right. :)

[korynth]

How about: If Zidane was waiting, Kuja would use him to perform the perfect show. Deceit, entrapment, merciless slaughter--he could see the look on that jester's face as he crushed his pathetic life beneath his hands. It would be something the gods enjoyed, no doubt.?

I feel like his original plans were probably something along the same lines, just meant for Chaos's warriors. That could just be me, though. The way he chose to liberate Terra so Kefka wouldn't have a shield, and the way he was having Zidane gather his friends to trap the others seemed like it might point that way to me, anyhow.

I liked your RP! It helped me so much, you don't even know. If you want me to fiddle with that line, though, I'll try to think of something.

Don't apologize for difficult! I want difficult! Sock it to me, babeh! ♥

[korynth]

Believe me, I need all the help I can get so I love the honesty. It helps me grow as a writer and it helps me put out something my readers are happy with. Win/win, I say! And no amount of critique will ever detract from my endless love for you! ♥

I tinkered with the line a little. Just a little! So feel free to tell me if you see anything else--in this part or the others. I want to give the S.S. Clouja a ravishing tale, and when it has your approval I'll post it on the community. :]

So please nitpick away, oh Captain, my Captain!

[dentedsky]

I REALLY loved this fic, so was so good! So bittersweet and sad, and so in character and well written.

I love that you put them together within the structure of original canon (actually I haven't played Duodecim yet, but I have been spoiled by parts of Cloud's story.) The relationship you portrayed is very them - I've always sort of seen them in a sort of 'friends with benefits and hide feeeeelings' kind of way. Spot on, honestly, I always liked this ship, any doubts I had were blown away by this.

Can you tell I loved this?! I loved this, could not stop reading. Hope to see more from you in the future.

[korynth]

Oh my! Thank you so much! I'm really glad I was able to write something you enjoyed. :) And even more that it was something that stayed true to the characters and the game. *yay*

I hope I don't disappoint in the future! Thank you again! ♥