very fragmented post; random thoughts

[konsensya]

i heard we put up a good fight today before losing 20-6 to steak jagermeister. not bad, considering that a lot of guys on the '06 griffins are rookies. getting there, getting there

Comments

[anteyes]

dude thats by far my favorite of anything you'd ever written. wow. i love it.
very well said.
but its sad. its very sad. and i think that you could have built upon the metaphor a bit more. like brought about more of a finality to the whole image and situation. it's sort of open ended and the persona lacks initiative and action to change the situation. parang he's just staying there with optimistic thoughts but without really bringing them to reality? i dunno. maybe i got the wrong image.

[konsensya]

yeah you're right...if there's one thing the persona lacks (at least in the first part), it's action. but in the end, he goes hey, to hell with the "right" words. :) parang ganun haha

thanks for the feedback :)