Distorted Daytime, Ch. 2/4

[konicoffee]

Title: Distorted Daytime
Chapters: 2/3
Author: konicoffee
Genre: Psychological Drama (somewhat), Angst, Smut
Disclaimer: I don't own any of the characters in this story.
Warnings: Sex
Rating: NC-17
Pairings/Characters: Aoi/Reita
Synopsis: He was Distorted Daytime’s highest paid agent, the most expensive agent in the business. His client was a company

Comments

[ejnerminskat]

I like it! It's good^^

[konicoffee]

Thank you so much! :)

[ejnerminskat]

you are welcome! :)

[konicoffee]

YAY, really happy you enjoyed this chapter. I was a little paranoid about this since I wrote this while still groggy from battling writer's block. XD

Thank you very much for reading. <3

[konicoffee]

Yup, three chapters. The next one will be the last one, so I can pretty much guarantee that there will be a hot Aoi/Reita scene. I hope I could write it well. I'll do my best. XD;;

[pandesal_luv]

The ending...! x333 That's why I love scenes in the rain.
They're so...romantic and somehow it conveys the message more. <3
Mannnnn, I totally pictured them looking hot in the boxing match. Really~ (*________*)
Hahaha~ Really creative! I loved it! It's full of awesomeness! (^_______^)

Can't wait for the last part~

[konicoffee]

The scene in the rain, admittedly, was created because I thought soaking wet Akira and Aoi would be sexy. Of course I sort of made it fit into the plot, but for the most part, the rain scene is fan service. XDDD

And I'm glad you liked the boxing spar. I hope it made up for the lack of sex in this chapter. |D

Thank you so much for reading!

[shou_suke]

Aww bless them, so cute. I can't wait to see how this pans out.

Just one little error I keep noticing that I want to point out. Every time the person speaking changes, you should start a new paragraph. It's correct formatting, and makes it easier to read. There was a few points that I was confused as to who was talking because you had both Aoi and Reita talking in the same paragraph.

So this:
"You're pretty good, Sir," he said. Akira chuckled as he nudged Aoi's fist with his. "And you," the teacher replied. "You have no weaknesses."

Should be:
"You're pretty good, Sir," he said. Akira chuckled as he nudged Aoi's fist with his.

"And you," the teacher replied. "You have no weaknesses."
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Other than that, it's very well written. (: Your Akira is love. <3

[konicoffee]

Alright, duly noted. I've changed the formatting now. You're right, it's less confusing to read now. Thank you so much! <3

[kerorii]

haww i really love your fanfics!!
(added you btw :D ♥)

i really like the concept of this fic and the characters are really lovable and authentic. ´3`

i'm so courious what's going to happen next

[konicoffee]

Added you back! ♥ and thank you, I'm glad you like my stories.

I've been working on the update for this for a long time now, but writer's block isn't kind to me and life in general has been taking a lot of my time. XD but I'll work on it soon since I have some free time now. I just need to wrestle the block off. x___x

Thanks again! :D