Spn Fic - Slipping Through the Cracks

[kokoda2007]

Title: Slipping Through the Cracks
Rating: PG-13 / Gen
Disclaimer: I don't own Supernatural or the characters …
Words: 5500
Author’s Note: Written for my entry in the Writers Guild December/January prompt challenge, cold. I was scrambling to meet the deadline, so beta’d in part by Supernaturaldh. All remaining mistakes are my own. (And, yes, this is

Comments

[jude_91]

I really liked, this and the ending makes me feel so bad for John. It almost made me cry, John kind of reminds me of the way my dad used to be, minus the demon hunting. This was really well written, thanks for sharing.

[kokoda2007]

Thank you so much :)

[silnt_whisperer]

terrific story!!
i have been really emotional ever since i heard about Kim and with this story...i just couldnt stop the waterfall....i loved it sooooooooo much...it kinda reminded of a boy i knew from my high school days...he was autistic n his parents were abusive..it took the boy to get an appendix n a broken rib to make his parents actually look at him with care n love.
thank you for sharing this one...definitely goes to my favourites! ^_^

*hugs....SU*

[kokoda2007]

Oh, that's a sad story :(

Thank you for reading - I'm glad you enjoyed.

[blueeyedliz]

New fic from you!!! *bounces*

Awesome story and I always adore the way you write...there's not many writers out there who can whump Sam like you do and I've enjoyed every word.

Liz x

[kokoda2007]

Thanks Liz.

Right now though, I'm feeling whumped out.

[annj_g80]

Oh Sam!

Bad John!

Oh Sammy! *sniffles*

You just know how to break a Sam!girl's heart :-)

[kokoda2007]

Oh, I don't want to break any Sam!girl's hearts. There aren't enough of us around.

[myristica1]

You've got a new on board. I love both boys, but I have a tender spot for Sammy. I loved this one. I loved it when Dean promised Sam that they would be there when he woke up. Dean always making fun, until the going gets rough. I liked it that Sammy turned to Dean when he heard his brother talk to him in the hospital, and that he called out for Dean when sick and alone, rather than his father. It just shows how much more Dean is in Sam's life than his dad is. You have a great grasp of the show-don't-tell angle and as a result I could really feel the cold slithering through Sam's poor body. And for John to finally see with his own eyes what he could not see before it got bad. You could see his love for Sam in that moment when reality strikes *him*. Great work!
~Myr~

[kokoda2007]

Thank you.

I'm glad you could feel the cold - I've been suffering through heat wave conditions, so even imagining snow was a little hard :)

[pinkphoenix1985]

wow this is intense and so sad!

[kokoda2007]

Thanks hon.